' Where Will I Look For You...? '

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Amanush..., Nov 5, 2007.

  1. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Where will I look for you,
    my love...?
    On roads that are unknown
    to me, perhaps...?

    In the morning breeze,
    when the sun upraises
    in all its splendour...?

    Or in the evening
    when disclosed are the clouds
    only to grant a glance
    at skies new and new earths...?

    Or in the night
    that mantles itself of stars,
    where there is always one
    that gleams more than others...?

    And really,
    I still don't know
    if I can ever find you
    with these burdens that I bear
    in the anxiety of my days...!

    But however
    Of this I am certain...!
    I won't stop looking for you,
    because in this search
    resides the sense
    of my existence...!

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  2. fairandlovely

    fairandlovely peeka-boo

    I was strangely disappointed. Having read your last poem I seem to have been expecting so much more yet I can't see anything wrong with what you've written. It just didn't grab my fancy though.
  3. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    the concept was awesome..
    but u havent given full justice to d thought..

    nevertheless.. good! but not excellent as per "amanush" standards..

    happy to c you posting again though.. happy diwali..
  4. Rude_gal:)

    Rude_gal:) New Member

    better than other stanzas......Good hai
  5. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    i think the plot ws gud, it just lacked something new...in terms of comparisions / contrast !
    but i really liked the unveness of spells

    over-all gud poetry

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