This ones a doozy I know but the words just flowed out and i couldn't stop them This is something I wrote with my sister in my mind from her point of view... I don't think I could bear to show her it so yeah you lucky people get to enjoy it instead warped logic I know whats there left to fight for for everything i give people just want more more of my time an ear to confide in a place they are safe from the world they can hide in pretty little lies and jokes to make them smile stroking their egos all the while they ask me to run a mile for them ive already run 10 but its just never enough when dealing with lives so rough so many problems can give you me solutions while inside my head feels like a mental institution but just listen as i bear my soul and make everything better and make everything whole they flock to me like lost little sheep too hurt and vulnerable for me to let them face defeat i get no apprieciation nothing to see me through but still i keep going i do it all for you seeking shelter i gave you a home then you betrayed me and blamed me while we fought on the phone when my mum died i was still there for you listened to you talk about the break up and all the hurt she put you through fighting back my tears the whole time you didnt make it to the funeral but you had exams and that was fine but i put everything aside to stop you falling into depression and you treated me like a counsellor and it was just another session even when you betrayed me with my sister when you knew just how close we were she was only seventeen just a little girl... i could have forgiven you still had you only stayed to fight but instead of trying to apoligize you chose self preservation and took flight i really should have seen this coming all the signs were there the little smiles and flirtations but i thought you wouldnt dare i thought our friendship was worth more to you than your own selfish needs but obviously thats not the case you were only too happy to leave the worst part is im really not surprised i know how your mind works and just how easy you can lie looking back now i cant believe i ever thought of you as my friend our relationship was so lopsided it was only a matter of time before it would end apart of me wishes i could regret all the time i put into you trying to help you with all the things you're going through when you never ever bothered to ask me how I! was to think that i had problems too and needed someone i could trust but i just dont have it in me to hate you all i ever wanted was for you to help me too ive spent my whole life putting everyone elses needs first please tell me is it ever going to be my turn?
touching ... it smells of reality .. i love your kind of people ...people who can look thorough others :* never show it to your sis .. !! Ok on a literary note i feel the poem could have been more concise ... although this is a very decent effort but using a strong metaphor could have turned it into a fabulous literary piece, do give it a try again if u get time !!
thanks for the feedback dont worry i dont plan on ever showing it to her and I understand what you mean I'll probably end up going over it a million times making changes here and there
