Waiting for another day...

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by horsesmouth, Mar 23, 2009.

  1. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    yea, its me again n my mood a bit sulken....as I waited for 5 long frustrating months to get my chance....and now its coming closer...



    The egg hatched and a tiny ave looked out,
    it grew up one day and flew away.
    As i sat looking out the window,
    waiting for another day.

    The sun rose into the sky,
    and the morning passed into noon.
    And i sat watching as the night went by,
    waiting for another day.

    The days whiled away into weeks,
    and weeks into months,
    And i waited for the moment to come by,
    it might come another day.

    My heartfelt desires did'nt happen;
    Wishes made so long ago.
    Buried inside some dark bottom,
    into the fathoms below.

    People say its destiny's ways,
    and i seem to be a mere puppet to life.
    But someday this wait shall end,
    and i'll leave for my voyage,
    on the path I am destined to,
    alone and content.
    Roses, gardens and beaches,
    the world shall be meaningless to me.
    Once I have waited another day...
    I'll be with the deep blue sea.

    comments??
     
  2. allstarsband

    allstarsband New Member

    these were the best lines

    Its a great poem really, m myself a smalltime poet but you're definitely a good one dude
    keep it up!

    you deserve reps!
     
  3. metalhead_junky

    metalhead_junky New Member

    Yea we really are puppets to life!
    wonder whats in your heart......

    neways superb thing!
     
  4. metalhead_junky

    metalhead_junky New Member

    Is this your real story? I guessed so
    no offence!
     
  5. wow .... whose the sailor ?...of course u will be the great sea
     
  6. maxeffect

    maxeffect New Member

    nicely written and a fantastic ending...
    keeping going !
     
  7. avi.singh

    avi.singh 6 strings lover

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  8. avi.singh

    avi.singh 6 strings lover

    same frm me..
     
  9. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    @avi.singh and maxeffect

    thanks a lott guyz!!
     
  10. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    well the sailor is whoever chooses to be with me...will you>?
    :p
     

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