Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Roadie2Rockstar, Feb 13, 2007.

  1. Roadie2Rockstar

    Roadie2Rockstar New Member

    Just a small valentine's day special.

    Love was not what we longed for.
    Love was yet what we found.
    You n me are 2 crazy souls.
    That were lost in a world of thorns.
    We always knew what we wanted n
    never cared about what we found.
    Now that we found each other,
    I hope we stick around.

    I am sure i will always love you.
    I know our hearts are true.
    I pray if we ever stop loving,
    our heart's stop beating too.

    :p: :p: :p: :p: :p: :p: :p: :p:

    Happy Valentine's Day !!!!!!!!
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  2. born2tab

    born2tab rhythm guitarist

    good one yaar..repped ya
  3. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    nice and simple
    good one..!
  4. #iR@


    dats actually a pretty good poem! *smiles*
  5. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto


    Sorry if this sounds kinda rude but
    "I pray if we ever stop loving,
    our heart's stop beating too."
    This line quite confusing.I assume you're indicating the depth of your love but who's to say the love from the other partner is just as much as yours?
    And who's to say if your partner breaks up with you for some reason,you'd still "pray" that both of you die???

    But being in the all so romantic Valentine's Day mood I don't think any1 will be cynical enough to notice that...

    Again,its a very nice poem.
  6. gi[lomu]rish

    gi[lomu]rish New Member

    what is this?Rockers dont believe in valentines day,they make it happen whenever they wish;)
  7. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    didn't like it, sorry. Too repititive and not enough imagery. I'm sure you can do better.
  8. Roadie2Rockstar

    Roadie2Rockstar New Member

    Thanks for the reps and any suggestions evryone. did not know i had a reply here checking it after very long.

    "Not neo" yes you got it right pal.
    That excatly what i meant with that line cause thats what many lovers think.
    Its what i see around me that i write. I have often seen many lovers when they have a break off and its too tough to get over it they just wish they drop dead -- so that line.
  9. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    ^^Oooh again..I really don't think both would wish to drop dead after a break off..some1 (who actually initiated the break up) must be happy or at least not sad enough to die!!!And is both are,I bow down to that love:dance:

    Sweet write

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