Unconscious Future

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Hardik, Feb 20, 2006.

  1. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    was reading vini's "that glass door"...when i got some thoughts,and wrote this..thanks vini.:)

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  2. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    The past we have trampled
    The present is weak
    But when future is unconscious
    All our hope are meek

    Beautiful lines !!
    Well done..:)
  3. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ^^yay finally..i got a reply...thanks varshita..i like those lines too..:)
  4. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    :rock: :rock: nice one hardik :rock: :rock:
  5. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    Thanks amit...:)
  6. #iR@


    Marvelous! well done man! :)
  7. nimitr

    nimitr New Member

    reminds me of the dialogue from Rang De Basanti .... "ek pair past mein, ek pair future mein , aur aaj pe hum M*** rahe hain" :p: .....

    Hardik dude dont mind i liked ur poem though trust me ... ;)
  8. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    "The past we have trampled
    The present is weak
    But when future is unconscious
    All our hope are meek

    Let the unconscious awaken
    Let the waves sweep past
    Through every new nurtured life
    Let God's realm last."

    liked the last two stanza's
    and dude i really liked the title..
    each word revolves round the main theme

    there are some entwined meanings..or maybe its me thinking a lot:eek::
  9. zoomingrocket

    zoomingrocket TeChNiCaL AdMiNiStRaToR

    Beautiful lines...
    Keep it up buddy..

  10. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    @hira,nimitr,..thanks a lot:)

    @martina...you thinking in da right direction ...thanks a lot:)

    @zoom...thanks buddy:)
  11. knights_diwani

    knights_diwani New Member

    Lovely poem got some deep lines...!I loved it:)
  12. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ^^thank you..:)
  13. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Thank God! for once i am thinking in the right direction!:)

    Cant rep you:(
  14. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ^lol...its k,..you replied,thats enough for me..:)
  15. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    i couldnt understand it earlier but now after reading the comments of ppl got it...yeh to bahutt hi acchi kalpana hai mitr...saadhoo saadhoo
  16. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ^thanks madhuresh...:)

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