Time Machine - A new original - check it out!

TIME MACHINE

I take a walk down memory-lane, into yesterday
I see the things that I said, and the things that I just couldn't say
As I turn the pages, of this book that everyone calls 'Life'
I see the lovely days, the days when everything was right here...
...trapped in my hand....
...then why'd it have to trickle down,
like little grains of sand.......
Sand-clocks....are ticking out my time...
...and I still don't know what to do


I take a trip down time-machine to take a look at my past
I see the chasm of drift between us, a rift so vast
As I set the wheels of time in motion, and make a trip down time
I see the wasted days, the wasted years, the wasted time of my life...
...ain't a bed-of-rose anymore...
...And I just feel like crying out, loud behind shut door....
...Door-bells are ringin in my mind...
...and I still don't know what to do

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Well not actually a new recording - did this scratch recording in 2005 I think...still pending since long to do a re-run with new effects and a pending lead solo for the song....takers welcome!

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Needless to say, constructive feedbacks are more than welcome...

Remember tht I`m not a singer, so I dont care if u didnt like the vocals - tell me abt the composition....

 

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kewl gr88888.......yur lyrics?? gud ones

 

forgot to reply shit


well overall nice work if we consider the lyrics + guitaring !!!


repped u

 

nice one there dude keep it up

 

Heard it man.
Liked it, but am not in my mind right now.
Will post later

 

good one geniusoid... i like lyrics and guitaring.. and bout ur vocals u can improve it... aint too bad..

 

Thanks for the feedback, guys! Yeah i`ll do a better recording soon...

 

im usually too lazy to check out org compositions..but was really intrigued to check urs after reading the lyrics in poetry forum...hmm quite nice..u have a darren hayes"ish" kinda voice..awesome effects and music..some room for improvement is there as i think u were struggling a little to fit the words in music..i dunno, maybe i wrong..but just tellin what i think..re-record someday if u want.

good going man!
reps for sure (after spreading)

 

nice work man! luv the lyrix! :rock:

 

@everyone.... thanks :cheers: