Thy Beauty

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by skaw, Sep 20, 2005.

  1. skaw

    skaw snooze

    Thy Beauty

    Beauty – a spread out rose, resembling a flame,
    Shines bright upon, me today,
    Just as bright, as a flame;

    She – with a light, to halt this night,
    She beams and gleams her beauty
    pleasing the eye, just so bright.

    So the bird of love, requests to fly,
    Just so high to see your smile,
    Behind that beauty a person resides,
    Just so sweet, for me to call mine.
    cYpHeR likes this.
  2. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Thats so good....keep posting some more good stuff Skaw..
  3. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    yup.. very nice indeed
  4. guitarangela

    guitarangela gran'ma

    well, the poem is good...but personally, i think the use of comma was abundant than's just making the poem to pause more than it needs........
  5. cYpHeR

    cYpHeR Banned

    whoa..tht was nice and beautiful too....reps
  6. hate_eternal

    hate_eternal Banned

    Very nicely written.
  7. skaw

    skaw snooze

    @guitarangela - i know what you mean, but for some reason i wanted it to be slow with pauses. I don't know, I just find it good the way it is. Thanx for the input though.

    And thanx everyone else for the encouraging comments.
  8. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    nice and very different from the usual poetry :grin:

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