The Parting

^Your replies are all the reps i need, thanks a lot!

 

Jesus, sarat!
You are amazing...and this was absolutely beautiful!

Silenced words within me that youve breathed life into...
I just hope you know what you are going to do with this?

 

^Haha, you're too kind sister darling. This was just in my mind and i needed to put it down. I'm glad you like it, and hehe, no i dont know, what am i supposed to do with it?

 

you have really put lots of efforts in it..i can see it...very good...

 

^Not to refute your honorable perception, but actually it wasnt that much of an effort at all. The real effort was to force myself to sit down and start, i finished in less than half an hour. I'm not like saying this out of self-pride or something, but rather that everything was right up there in my head, i just put it onto paper.

 

:nw: :nw: :nw:
One of your best poems ever!!!! the imagery was so vivid....the poem was amazingly, beautifully, nicely, wonderfully, superbly, marvelously, magnificently, brilliantly done!!!(and there ends my list of adjectives)....
reps for you.....:beer:
more than that, love for my shweet big brother :hug: :nw: :nw: :nw:

 

^Haha, c'mere baby sis :hug: Thank you so so much for that wonderful post honey, just makes me proud of myself. I love you very much too.

 

:nw: :nw: hey distu bro...that was awesome..dont have words to explain....u can write so deep?..never thought...well reps bro..keep it up..:beer:

 

nice composition. I like the reference to the greek mythology!

 

Haha, i never thought i could write too bro! Thanks to the girls in my life. Thank you very much for reading bro, much appreciated.

@abhay, thanks for checking out brotha.

 

oh yes..sure as heck

 

^Hellz yeah, thanks a load!

 

Man!
You DO write some thing!

 

^lawl, 'ey! What's that mean? : Thanks a load brotha :rock:

 

Mediocre start. I've always mantained that the AAAA kind of rhyming isn't great and the dying, crying, lying gets bothersome. However, when I say mediocre, I should add I mean mediocre in context of the entire piece.

Cliche idea, beautifully expressed. 'nuff said. Actually no, beautiful doesn't even come close.

meh, nothing to bitch about really but I thought you went sorta flat here. Nothing to write home about really. Maybe I didn't like that you went too literal at the end...I'm not sure really.

<3 <3 <3

river= styx?

Nicely done....really sets up the next verse well.

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Now this, my friend, was classy. It reeks of awesomeness. I can't tell you how pleased I am with this last verse.



Yeah, I guess I didn't add a lot to what's been said but what the heck, I tried. I won't try digging deeper since you've said it's fiction.




OMG AWSUM REPS 4 U!

 

wow - disturbed dude...u got raw talent dude...!!!
GO FATNESS!!!

 

oh yes, i forgot to point out the lying dying part :grin:

 

wt - i think its cool....wots the difference anewez....

 

yes, but i forgot to actually critique the poem as i was lost in it's "coolness"

 

yeh - the coolness that radiated from it was enuf to blow me away too...