Its a kind of a cliqued theme...............and this was one of my first ones So pple tell me if u like it.... Sometimes I wish sometimes I hope, That this world would change, For improvement there is scope. And for this world to live as one Friendship is the rope. I wish there was no hatred And only there was peace. I wish there were no countries And there were no boundaries And no piece of land that we’d fight for, This earth is a gift to us For which we must thank the might for. I wish there was no religion And killing in the name of it And there was no racism of caste and creed I wish people were real, not fakes Just look at the mess all this fallacy makes. To compete this material world life’s become so racy I wish one day there’ll be an end to hypocrisy. Methinks. And if every one of us thinks so One day there’ll be a world we hoped for. Filled with love and brotherly bliss, If we really vouch for it. So come on you people bring out your heart. To make this world a better place All of us can play a part.
Sure Bro...i concur. Very well said....like the concept. It could have been better, though this conveys the message aptly. There now arises, if it's necessay to put better or convey better. Whatever, I liked it.
Hail ! Guru of Peace i liked this one Bhaskar...i take the liberty of calling you that idefixe reminds me of quickfix - (no offence meant).. err.. is it related to Asterix in anwy ? anywy getting back to the topic i liked the poem even the title is apt.. thinking of this poem only two words come to mind.. *sigh* "if only..."
Dude theme is gud title is thoughful but certainly lacks flow. cd have reworked but must say quite nice for unedited version.
All the citic and appreciation is welcome...............! @sharmontime....thanx for ur comments,but i never wanted to change the fisrst draft.........it was all at 1 go Hey thanx bubbly........tired of calling u that (feels filmy....lol), if i can only know ur name And yaa my nic...........idefixe is somethin as fixated 2 ur ideal course..anyways u can call me by name.........and yaa u can help me with some reps and thanx walkalone...............ill take ur comments
ya.. there is scope..that world could be better place.. n there is scope..that this poem cud have been more effective wit just some more efforts.. but....good job..
