The Moist View,,

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by vini, Jan 25, 2006.

  1. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    The Moist View

    I See someone sitting by the bedrest with her hands covering the face. Drops and more drops appear from those moist yet parched eyes and disappear somewhere..

    The eyes of emptiness now staring at the walls. Answers they seek and have grown up waiting for 'em to come along.

    I see those eyes frisking through the pages of Bible..thinking it might give some clue
    but the scripture beams blank instead, just like those blank eyes so blue.

    This Blankness is so evident and omnipresent, but still those eyes serve the blankness daily without a fail, by washing it with all the dew filled inside.

    Yes, i still see those eyes staring at the dumb, unanswerable walls and have continued to do so for years.

    When will these eyes recieve something save the Water??

    "Now thats another question, dont you know questions are never answered" affirms my soul. So, tired i break that mirror and leave the bedrest. ​
  2. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    great one...
  3. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    i really did not understand this poem yaar....its really good but it went over ma head.......u wrote a magical poem haan but...
  4. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    well, i was expecting..sumthing like this.

    either the nature of my work is ambiguous or u need to gather more cells to decipher it
    or its too state-of-mindish

    but thanx, both of u!
  5. can_i_play

    can_i_play New Member

    good one vini....
  6. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    Tum kaun ho mahan bande u write really really well....

    see if this is close

    Ruk aa saans shoor mat kar, vaqut hai ibaadat ka ye
    dheere bhi nahi band ho dhakan mujhko-akeela sehne de
    main pahuch kar aa gaya uss ke dar se phir yahi
    kehna uski aadat nahi to buut ko buut hi rehne de !!

    buut :- means mujassama/statue of a deity,god
  7. vini

    vini Repeat Offender


    umm..yeah kind of :)
    some part

    u wrote it?
  8. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

  9. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    kitna mana kartee rahe yadoon ye gajha teri nahi
    banke ke phir paani bhe to rokna kyaa bhene de !!

    Ruk aa saans shoor mat kar, vaqut hai ibaadat ka ye
    dheere bhi nahi band ho dhakan mujhko-akeela sehne de !!
  10. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

  11. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    "its very easy to write complex but very difficult ot deal with it"
    this below 1 is not by me but very promptly expresses my thinking..

    Koi aankhon aankhon se baat kar leta hai
    Koi aankhon aankhon mein mulakaat kar leta hai
    Bada Mushkil hota hai tab Jawab denA
    Jab koi KhamosH rehkar Sawaal kar leta hai................ ...

    baas keep posting
  12. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    beautiful piece there....

    i see you've been thinking a lot.. got lots of questions in your mind?
  13. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    too good....
  14. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    thanx guys!!

    yeah..i've become a quiz book with no answers at the back page :)

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