The Horrible Truth

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by i'm_not_neo, May 22, 2007.

  1. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    No intro to this one....

    Its a horrible feeling
    to sit aside
    the person you love the most
    knowing she gave you life
    it feels all so unjust.
    she's lived happy years
    And now she has grown old
    Age takes a bitter price
    And time always takes its toll.
    She sheltered me from the bad
    And even when I messed up things
    This angel took me under her wings.
    She's the reason I'm here
    Her milk runs in my veins
    I know I've caused her troubles
    but she never shows the pain.
    She's divine at least
    And even if there's food for one
    She'll starve herself
    Just to give me a feast.
    I hide my sorrow,
    Conceal my frustration
    She holds my hand
    with the serenity of the moon,
    the oracle she says,"It'll be over soon"
    I can't help it any longer
    I burst out and cry
    As I realize the horrible truth
    That even angels can die.
  2. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!


    You really know how to get emotions across through words, well done!
  3. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    ^^Thank you *forgets modesty* :) :)
    No but that really did feel good to hear..because that is what I always want my poems to be..
  4. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    this is like a real from the heart effort,,u actualy lived this moment...u knw the most common shape in world is parabola(not a circle) things grow very fast rise and plummet quickly, so are the pattersns of emotion ...
    so actually any one can rite about love and all but with the feelings on either side of spectrum like death...u can judge was it felt or observed ...pata nahi ?? i shud not poke here right so forget it ...Awsome poem !
  5. maxeffect

    maxeffect New Member

    vry well put up poem, sorry emotions...
    actually liked the theme, and the way u highlighted it
  6. #iR@


    wow... this was some awesome poem... i mean u have expressed so well by using such simple words and since u have talked about something dat happens wid everyone... u just reminded me of something that nearly made me cry... ANYWAY so the poem was just :nw: and u know it tou theres no point in telling u again and again! :p

    ^something i think about everynight before sleeping...
  7. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    :shock: when did I get so many comments on this??!!!
    Well anyways,I'm very glad you all liked it...I mean okay,the composition wasn't exactly perfect but still the poem did have an impact..thank you every1...

    @madhuresh...madhuresh yes parabola true...I used to believe life is more like an ellipse though..lets not get into geometry [:p]No this poem is based on observation or imagination actually..thanks a lot...

    @maxeffect...nice nickname I must say...thanks a lot man...

    @#iR@.....simple words,did you say???thanks a lot..that means a lot to me..ohh made you nearly cry??again,sweet compliment..thank you (though I didn't want to get you sad or anything )
    And lastly.....Hey!!!there is point in telling me again and again!!!!!!!don't you stop commenting..:)

  8. #iR@


    ^ u just LUV getting praised...dont u?! lol

    U ROCK! \m/ ( " ) \m/

    ab khush? *actually laughing*
  9. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    ^^^ much as I appreciate that,I think you got me all wrong...well not about the "you love praising" part meant keep replying in the rest of my posts, not this one again :p...and well I said keep the comments I'm willing to take the negative ones too..(don't you post -ve comments :aggre: )

  10. #iR@


    ^ lol... ok i got that part but i just felt like replying here again so i did! :p now i think i am close to getting banned! :p: "IF" incase that happens i'll kill u i swear! :p

    now i'll just :dance: ma way out...
  11. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto caught the :dance: frenzy!!!:) are close to being banned..and by replying to that even I am:p: if we both get banned it'll be the headline tomorrow.."Poets lose humanity and kill each other"...:p:

    And now I'm really going to stop..or we both will have to face a "horrible" ban :p: (yes I have a sack of corny jokes)...


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