Thats it

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Hardik, Jan 19, 2006.

  1. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    This is my 3rd attempt here...plz comment on this one ...

    Thats it

    Thats it girl
    Now I got you
    You Used me all
    But now I caught you
    You told all lies
    And I bought You
    You talked all sugar
    All day I thought you
    You prepared the poison
    That i taught you
    But it was I who drank it
    It was not you

    Enough is enough
    It has to end here
    There is one more thing
    I want you to hear
    There are more levels
    My frustration can reach
    But I cut it short,so

    Thanks for reading.......
    BubblyMartini, Varshita and #iR@ like this.
  2. bono

    bono New Member

    good short and sweet or b i t c h y :)
  3. slash_i_m

    slash_i_m Laid to Rest

    u need to consult a psychiatrist.r u depressed ? antways niiiice.i can't even write three or four line:)
  4. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    who's that person..u r refering too...???
    ok.. thats none of my business... tellin bout poetry... its good attempt..
    being frank... its just an attempt..
  5. #iR@


    i reallyyyy liked it don't know why could be cause i am too emtional rite now or watever... but somehow ur short poem seemed to be really effective..... i exactly don't know why but i really liked it man! very nice! and hope u r over all the frustration.... reps comming ur way!
  6. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    hmm.. i loved ur other poem... but this one jst didnt strike a chord with me!
  7. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    Whatcha going thru????
    ..cant be pms...
  8. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ^^thank u for the feedback ppl...i know this one sucks...but was really frustrated that happened to me long time back..its been almost 2 yrs we split up...but that day i saw her at a friends party,i felt like killin her then n there,but just went home,n i din want to damage anything,so wrote this:'(
    am not depressed or goin thru nething,i am over it now...i was over it in 3 months,but that day just seein her...u know.....oh,whatever...i promise i wont write such stupid stuff next time....
  9. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    aahh...well thats explains a lot, dude.
    Life is a b.itch. And im sorry-

    Hope we start gettin to see some of your better poems soon!!!
  10. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    We all go thru crap, jst try to channel that crap into more beautiful words next time :grin:
  11. uj_6string

    uj_6string Nickelodean Addict :D

    i liked one of your earlier poems a lot yaar....."itz better in hell" was damn awesome.....
    ^^^^cryptic angel....well said....
    ive went through loads of crap and my gf broke was noone's fault actually.....but still....we are good friends today.....:grin:
  12. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    thank u promises to write better next time...:grin:
  13. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    Ur hurt .. n it shows in the have it in u to write... maybe something good next time :)
  14. write2madhur

    write2madhur dowdiegeekgizmofreak

    thats it dhichkiaaoon
  15. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    @Knight_ki_gf..thanks for understanding,will do that next time..:)

    @write2madhur...haha...could have done that to her,but din have a gun handy
  16. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

  17. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Girls can be real b!itches sometimes.. :eek::

    its a good poem..
    to the point and the Right words!
    good u put it to paper..rather than doin something else

    Take care dude!
  18. write2madhur

    write2madhur dowdiegeekgizmofreak

    well hardik shall i tell u a big secret of taking revenge
    PM me if u wanna know the answer
  19. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    ^^no dude,i dont wanna take revenge,i am a very nice guy u know..:grin:
    i know how i can take revenge,and make her pay bigtime,but i just dont wanna do it...
    things happen in life n you just cant do nethin bout them...some things are better left as they are....
  20. sanju_strings

    sanju_strings 50 Pai$e <3V/S<3 50 CeNt$

    hey thts a nice tot :shock:

    ps--->hardik sup wit u m8 senti q ho gaya :p: aray her bunday ko eak laaat zaroor padti hain koi tenssion nai u took 3 mnth to come out i took a yr :) n tht was worst

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