Poem or Lyric ???

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by imr001, Oct 4, 2010.

  1. imr001

    imr001 New Member

    Going through bad time,
    i just seek 4 whom i can fly.
    Having enjoyed all alone,
    feeling like a black sky.
    Wish i could cry,
    having lost all tears from my eyes.
    Leaving all wishes alone, telling goodbye----
    Will my will be the only 1 and all through what i can make my mind laugh at every single storm.

    HOW WAS THAT ???
     
  2. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    i liked it..!! :) its nice...str8..nd emotnal.. :)
     
  3. imr001

    imr001 New Member

    Night is BROWN,
    having sleep alone in CROWDS.
    Never seen b4 u have made me feel what is CHANGE.
    Having a reverse turn,
    i see u felt me there,
    having all sound WISHez regarding me.
    Realizing....Realizing...and deciding 2 break the chain of DEPRESSION 2 be free from all sorts of PAIN.
    Now i see wht i NEED
    wht i OWE
    & wht i am supossed 2 do...do...do...




    ( hey though night is brown there, it was written in a brighty morning.)
    how was that ???
     
  4. i dont see much of poetry here... to me i thought he just spilled it..!!

    if u put a little more u can be great ..im sure...

    keep rockiing
     
  5. imr001

    imr001 New Member

    To monica
    Hey u gotta take a look at the title. i thought it was poem or lyric?
    So still i m confusd too is it really poem or lyric.......................
    hwever keep it up................................................................
     
  6. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    good...
    Some polishing needed though..
    Keep posting :)
     

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