Iam stuck in a labyrinth cant find out what to do I keep on getting hints can i believe these to be true? what will be in the end will i succeed? march ahead is the new trend but, my feet is too tired to face new challenges but everytime inspired to take revenges from the life that gave only sorrow and pain i just have to accept the expectations of the people around in this game where there is no relation its just like hell with everyone puffed up with rage and ready to sell their humanity for their advantage well i keep getting myself motivated i cant get down again i get started and the time counts down i meet people trying to hinder my aim and trying to make me unhinged by their weird character i feel everything is pinched from my life i do only strive to get myself victory just a shame on me that i cant get rid of this mystery and all the blame on me thinking all the time negative thrash all sorrow, march ahead you need not be so possesive whatever you want alone you can get. --------this is my 2nd poem i dont feel like its that good to be posted but.... -abishek999-
the poem's good overall but i seriously cannot tolerate grammatical mistakes in poems, unless they're intentional.
thank u morbid angel thanx i know there r gramatical mistakes i neglected these just to rhyme. again thanx after such a long time i got 1 reply.:dance: :grin:
2nd one huh?I'd rather not discourage you then..but yeah,work on grammar,let the rhyming come on it's own and dun break lines unnecessarily..I'm assuming you wrote each line as it came to your head and hit enter after every new idea,which is cool..but make sure you edit it later so that it makes sense easily.
