one big mistake

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nimisha, Jan 27, 2008.

  1. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    been out of touch wid writing.. but made some attempt.. n so here it is..

    every thing was good
    everything was fine..
    saying it in brief,
    i was on cloud nine

    we were so in love..
    head over heal..
    may be words r less
    to say how did i feel

    believe me,
    we never had a fight,
    just sugar word s
    to my delight

    there was no pain
    no sorrows at all
    so much of bliss
    the world seem too small

    he was just wid me,
    all day n night,
    we never did lose
    each others sight

    no ego clash
    no worries for cash
    all smooth n set
    nothing harsh or rash

    no betrayl
    nothing to cheat
    no loosing faith
    we were meant to be

    and then came
    this stupid mistake
    which ruined it all
    everything was hell

    bitter words n thoughts
    no calm no peace
    be it money or love
    wonder wher it is

    bed of roses gone
    left thorns and thorns
    with empty heart
    now i just mourn

    then i regret
    i did it why?
    it was just a dream
    why i opened my eyes
     
  2. sprasad25

    sprasad25 New Member

    wow..nimisha..thats a very nice poem....kudos!
     
  3. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    hey thanks buddy!
     
  4. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    .................................!
     
  5. tanvi rustagi

    tanvi rustagi New Member

    hey quite gud n readable.gud use of vocab.hey bt i noticd smthn in ur writins tht u often go 4 sorows in thm!!!!!!!
    is it bcoz of persnl life or u jst write in ths way unintentionly
     
  6. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    nice... very well ritten... :)
     
  7. alpha1

    alpha1 I BLUES!

    Hah, are all girls prone to this "mistake" thingie?

    :RollLol:
     
  8. elfascinating

    elfascinating risqué

    Isn't it true that "Lose" is the most misspelled word in the English language?

    "Lose/Loose"
     
  9. rickkky_rich

    rickkky_rich Banned

    nice work !!!
     
  10. nimeetshah

    nimeetshah New Member

    This was the best thing i ever read...... Just to let you know I am ur BIG fan....
     
  11. tarunbhargav

    tarunbhargav New Member

    realy dear great job done..
     
  12. good one !!

    she dosent posts here any more or what ?
     
  13. efghi...u read the poem......give comments on poems not words....Looser...!
     
  14. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    ^^ ye doctor saab bhuut accha likti thi ....!!
    mere liye to naam hi gazal tha.... chali gayii unn hi ek din ... na jaane kunn ( hota hia zindagi ke saath...)
     
  15. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    wapas aa gayi hu abhi
     
  16. distorted

    distorted satan

    Luking fwd fr more of yr fabulous work...
     
  17. ^^ what is this chakkar ?
     
  18. distorted

    distorted satan

    Which chakkar?
     

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