~~Ocean Eyes~~

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by BubblyMartini, Oct 9, 2005.

  1. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Found this in an old Diary

    Ocean Eyes

    Your eyes remind me of the Ocean
    Churning a love potion

    Letting loose a thousand storms
    I shudder to think the wrath they may bring

    Intoxicating as love can be
    Dont set your eyes on anyone but me

    Sweet as honey clear as dew
    Drown me into them before i bid adieu....

    Martina ---'-<@
  2. DrSaurabh

    DrSaurabh Wh@+s Up D0C

    :cry1: bubbly i expect something bubblier than this......somethin more filled with life
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    filled with life????
  4. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Hey people ..
    this is one of my old poems...
    would appreciate if you'l could gimme your views
    good or bad...jus be honest!:eek::

  5. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Hah, we should write a book together....(with your poems doing most of the work)
  6. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    It's well written but humdrum...a bit of a let down since I've read a bit of your recent stuff. Beautiful imagery.

    The last 2 lines sorta ruin it for me. All I can think of as I read through that part is doing that exam handshake with my friends singing "Bread and butter, honey and jam, best of luck for your exam".

    Out of curiousity, how old were you when you wrote this? and how old are you now?
  7. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Thanks dear
    this was written a couple of years ago...
    was gonna add something more to it later...but left it at this

    and i guess you know how old i am:eek::
  8. nimitr

    nimitr New Member

    oye bubbly oye bubbly... nice poem bubbly ..... :)

    i luv ur avatar
  9. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    I don't actually :eek:: 19?
  10. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    so do i:)

    um... so hows the poem...?

    @Bjr-- REALLY?? :shock:
  11. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    yes, really :)
  12. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    uh oh..


    i'm not 19..
    not even intellectually :)

    you should know where you put your heart ..

    i mean <3 :)
  13. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    ocean.......tht reminds me of GOA.........* sighs*
  14. slash_i_m

    slash_i_m Laid to Rest

    VeRy nOicE.:)
  15. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Thanks slash!:)
    glad U liked it
  16. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    hah, tease!

  17. #iR@


    @ bubbly...short but nice! :)

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