MY :: STRANGER ON THE DOOR ( sad one.....i guess )

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by abhimanjrekar, Mar 6, 2006.

  1. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    donno wht made me write this....can be sort of sad...jus wrote it and put here....wonder if ya people like it....:cool:


    On the count of four,
    I heard a knock on the door,
    Curious,i looked to see,
    There was a stranger on the door.

    Cops they were,
    Saying something to my mom i couldnt hear,
    What has gone wrong now?
    My mind filled up with fear...

    I saw my mom cry,
    I din knew the reason why,
    They brought someone wrapped in white,
    I couldnt hold my nerves tight.

    Shocked at what i see,
    The cloth removed and it was me,
    I had forgot i wasnt anymore,
    And thts why,
    There was the stranger on the door....
  2. vishwa_reborn

    vishwa_reborn New Member

    i mean how u got that idea.. one word superb...
  3. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    ^^ thx..donno re...started writin with the title and it just came out.....
  4. nimitr

    nimitr New Member

    fantastic abhi ... i cant believe this is the same abhi who is so well known for the crap he writes .... this one was gr88 .....
  5. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    haha..thx man..ya i can write sometimes...and i write only for u people who r ther to read my poems regularly....i don mind even if they r few as long as they r ther but..thx.....and don worry ..the crap is on the way..hehe......
    Sharmontime likes this.
  6. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Abhi...m struggling for words now...that ws an awesome theme on which u wrote.....
    good to see that change in u :)
  7. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    thx...u know wht i consider myself as a flash poet.....bole to whatever thought comes to my mind within tht particular instant i jus write it down..i don think much on a poem.....also this poem jus went on in a flow...this is my best as far as i can say..thx again....
  8. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    nice one...words playing hide and seek with me to describe the poem.
  9. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    good very good bahuut acchaaaaaaa...kmaal ho gaya dhoti phaat gayi rummal ho gaya.........
  10. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    ^^ haha..thx ...
  11. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    @Abhi, edit your posts, remove the damn smileys and correct the spellings, it'll do the poem a world of good. One of your better poems, i have to say.
  12. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    ^^ ok man...thx for it...
  13. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    ^^i'm gonna have to agree...

    do that n it'll be good :)
  14. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    yo i did....
  15. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    :mad: !!!!!!!!!
  16. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    ^^ hey bhagwan,.........hehe...** goes to buy grammar book **
  17. rock all

    rock all New Member


    hey its a very different concept from the usual, pretty nice
  18. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    You can write well if you make up your mind
    not neccessary you Have to write crap to know whats "not-crap"
    i repeat your one big Chhupa Rustom....i liked the poem..!..:)
  19. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    where u stole from that concept from?
    was it your brain behind it...??
    hard to believe...
    read your last poems also...(serioz ones) ..u r going great..

    the thought is awesome.. n so the poem is good...
  20. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    ^^ yaarrrr....STOLE.....nahiiiiiiiii.........itz my originall........kabhi kabhi i find my brains.....

    @ bubbly, thx again....chupa rustam nahi hua main...apun open rustam.....

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