My Recording ::: Superman's too late

hey = is it me dreamin - or is this for real --- i posted a post wid dis name abut a week ago and its not there anemore...:awe:
ok - watever - so im posting this stuff all ovver agin...
https://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=493287&songID=3647180
first the link - its a song i wrote on my own - and stuff - i like it - lesseeee wat u think abut it,,,
fatty

 

is that an original ?
the strumming and all is pretty good.....but i cant make out the vocals dude
the crow and the dog add a nice touch :...
really good for an original, but i coudnt understnd the vox

 

ok - - i'll post the vocals and the chords --- YES it an Original!!! - it was a fluke - but the werds i had written as a poem - and they just fit rite in - so yeah --- yeah i like addin sound effects to my songs....thanx fer the feedback - need a b8er soundcard and mike...so yeah - u prolly wont hear much vocals...

 

i still couldnt understand why u made 2 threads?

Ok..out of as many songs u've posted..i think this was best and what could be a bigger compliment that the best is actually ur own work i personally liked it..u need to improvise on ur vocals..guitaring is good

 

thank god u mentionned coz i thought i had some eye defects :

:RollLol: :RollLol:

hey sounds nice dude

guitaring is really g8:think:

 

thanx - i got a b8er recording in the upload...

 

i guess the vocals weren't that good too much bass.but the guitarin neat as hell.

 

ok - so i reduce the bass in the vocals?

 

Yeah..even i noticed that..
Please Do!..if u can
and can u send me the lyrics of this song or urs?

 

Nice one man... I havent heard the original song, nonetheless, awesome strumming and good singing ...

You earned some reps for me :

 

Are u superman's fan? coz it's dubyaman these days. but u do kool guitaring n strumming. i think the crow n dogs were like giving there appreciations once u stop .. kinda yehhhhh u rock :rock:. isn't it :

nice original dear

 

Which software did you use for all those weird noises ?

 

good ...!!
i cld not get what u were singing...but everything else was good

the crow+dog combo was a perfect ending..

 

@ everyone - long list i got to say...so here we go...
+ thanks fer even lookin at my thread...:
+secondly - i recorded the voice and the guitar together - except fer the overlap ofcource - so i dont think i can remove the bass from the voice widout affectin the rest of the song...so i'll see wat to do...
+i wrote the song on my own - so im confused when u say "[highlight]original song"[/highlight]
+yeh - i kno the vocals are crap and that they are pretty much incomprehensible...thats partly cuz of my voice and the rest's cuz my mic and that upto the mark...so thats that....wat abut givin me some tips on how to make my guitarin better - cuz rite now - im just a rhythm player- i think...
thanx dudes/duddetes...lyrix on their way - u want the chords too...??

 

ok - so this is the song - dunno which chords these are - but the back rhythm guitar basically plays on::: (Tune one step down...)
and oh yeah - i play mostly barre chords...
dunno the strummin - it just came naturally....

first...

|-3---
|-3-------
|-5----
|-5-----
|-3------
|-3----- [over and over]

|-3---3---5---0------
|-3---5---6---1-----
|-5---5---7---2-----
|-5---3---5---2------
|-3---3---5---0------
|-3---3---5---0----- [x2]

after the second time :-
|--3---3-----
|--3---3---
|--4---5---
|--5---5---
|--5---3---
|--3---3--- [x4]

ok - cuz im lazy - to simplify things for me....here's akey...
\\\\\\|-3---3---5---0---3---
\\\\\\|-3---5---6---1---3--
\\\\\\|-5---5---7---2---4--
\\\\\\|-5---3---5---2---5---
\\\\\\|-3---3---5---0---5---
\\\\\\|-3---3---5---0---3--
refer :: R H U Am G (barre form)
P.s>>> R H & U arent real chord names - i dunt know which kords those are - so its a referal name...

the song goes like...
R H U Am G R
Another man becomes.....Prey....to a bullet of the aristro - cracy
His mother prays.......death....upon the seas
The youth sits and mourns for another life lost invain
for another life lost in fighting - lost in pain

|-x--
|-x--
|-7--
|-7--
|-5--
|-5-- R G R
his brother swears revenge - and becomes - a terrorist

(then do a cupla bars of the first structure...)

(same as first thingy...)
and yes i believe - in tomorows that'll die
i no longer believe - in heroes in the sky
how long must it take - for us to realize
anyone who rises against - must be destroyed

G Am
our land - our freedom [over and over]

(same as first thingy...)
when superman arrives - everyone is dead
superman arrives a little too late
he sits on a hill and rests his head
and cries out loud cuz he got sold

and yes i believe - in tomorows that'll die
i no longer believe - in heroes in the sky

G R
superman got sold [over and over]
G Am(Let Ring...)
superman's too late....

(and for those who specialize in it)
BOW WOW - KwAAAA...
the song has no specific order - cuz if it did - i wud've screwed it...so yay - mod it if u wish

@whosoeveraskedwhetheriwasasupermanfan... NO i aint a superman fan = and i hope after reading the lyrics - u prolly unnerstand the title...
it just basically about corruption and stuff...u kno - heroism lost... that kinda stuff...
so hope u like it = and soorry fer the lame chord notations...
FAttY!

 

This is really nice n one of the best written fatty. Do make sense but get outta disappointment kid. i dont want to discuss this all, u hv a long way to go n njoi life.

fromwhomsoevraskedthtursupermanfan >> tht was jus trivial saying superman fan .. tease

:beer:

 

hey - no offence given or taken - buds :grin:

 

come on, never. n y r u so serious these days. mom dad nay :aggre: .

anyways "original song" is ur own composition + self written.

 

hey -= who sed and wat made u feel im serious - im as serious as - i dunno - a man on a wheelchair in a crotch kickin competition...yeh - my parents ARE after my life - i ran up the phone bill (courtesy - internet and IGT) to like 7000 bucks last month - so now im not s'psed to be online - but i am (courtesy - a phone wire i bought fer myself...) they want me to study fer my class 12th - jeezus...or watever.... yeh - i kno "original song" is ur own composition + self written. - i wuz refering to DjCrunkMix sayin = havnt herd the original though...or watever =
chal dude = enjoy life...and NEVER participate in a crotch kicking competition...it hurts bad...owww

 

wtf - why am i suddenly a tabber now?