My attempt at Shayari :)

Hello-ji.

This is my first 2 attempts at shayari... my hindi isn't the gretest so...tell me how it is!

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jo bhi hota hai achay kay liyay hota hai, yay kehtay hain laug,
phir kyun itna dard sehtay hain laug,
kisa kay daman mein khushi, kisi ki daman mein itna ghum,
aur is bay-insaf duniya mein jee rahay hain hum!


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jad dekhoon usay is dil mein ujalay uthay,
ek aag si jalay aur jal jal kay na bujhay,
yay aankhen jhukay aur dhadkan rukay,
phir bhi kyun aankhein chup chup kay lukay

 

hey nice bit of shayari... keep it up!!...btw is it ur own work ?? :

 

its fine... but need to work more on skills yet...

 

@ harls: koyi shaq? It's a PakPride original... cant u tell by the horrible hindi

@ nimisha: will do... i'll keep tryin

 

Very nice shayari attempt dude