This one is my last poem (at least for a few months...can't be sure if I'll never do it again) on IGT...This one is,well, after a long time I actually wrote something for me...I don't know if I kept the rhyme scheme etc... Please do comment on it if you read it... Moving On Do you really know how much it hurts to know your true love Loves you no more that your presence no longer brings smiles... just because destiny took you away for some years and a few hundred miles... We shared a love which reflected innocence, I return to find, You've found someone elso now, And all this time I was gone, I never quite learned to move on.. You're happy,I can see that I love to see you happy, but I can't deny the jealousy, I wish it was me those eyes looked upon, because I've always been a loser at moving on.. You can't feel my frustration, My rage at destiny, Subconscious convincing me, that we were never meant to be.. Yet I can't fix a heart that's burnt and torn, How pray tell do I move on??!! I feel like I should just tell her that I still love her risk what's left between the two of us maybe I'll write a poem...sing a song, And just forget about moving on.. Yet she smiles as she sees her love and I'm burnt alive to know Its not me anymore Our eyes meet for seconds I don't see the love anymore I look back at her Pretend a happy smile And walk on.... And I'm sure she'll never know That I never moved on...
^ real. awesome. can't pic 1/2 fav lines. i like the whole of it. reps added. do hell with the rhyme scheme.
oye kamaal hai yaar tu rooz nayi likh deta hai .... aur ek angle se dekha jaye to waht ever u hv posted is all my thoughts bas sab jageh thoda difference !! And I'm sure she'll never know That I never moved on.........lol as i said ye mera thought hai jo tum simat ke chali gayi, mere saath rahi ....bas aarazoo... vo ajj bhi gumsum khadi, jaise keh rahi... kuch kar na tu.... good thought good composition just whats missing is that rigid thought process which makes a boy, a man !
Is/was your poetry-writing therapeutic by any chance? Loved this one. Don't care for rhyming scheme etc., it's good the way it is
@madhuresh..lol..nice to know our thinking processes match somehow.. "oye kamaal hai yaar tu rooz nayi likh deta hai .." You don't have to worry about that now..this one will be the last for some months now..I have too many ideas bursting in my head and every time I get lost in some of my favourite music/get the occasional artistic impulse presto!!I've made a poem.. "good thought good composition just whats missing is that rigid thought process which makes a boy, a man !" Maybe that's because I'm still a boy :dance:
@cryptic_angel: Well poetry definitely works as a therapeutic though I never wrote for that purpose..:dance: This one in particular, is literally therapeutic for me..because uhm..forget it...it'll be unnecessarily lenghty: See I get a bit carried away....thanks a lot...glad to know you liked it
OMG! firstly THIS IS I THINK BY FAR UR BEST POEM after the magician! dude... i am SERIOUSLY addicted to ur poems or something... might sound WAYY to dramatic but ur poems r SERIOUSLY GOOD... and yea secondly and MOST importantly... this CAN"T be ur last poem... i jsut got free from ma xams... i need good stuff to read and u canNOT stop riting! hehe... i just hope things get better at ur end... =)
You know even I thought this one was my best!!But I couldn't just say that coz that would be like completely modesty-less of me: lol...I would hate to let down such a nice fan but you know, I've reached the point where I don't enjoy writing these days (except this one I guess)..its being more mechanical and less emotional these days..and I don't write it with the passion I used to..that's why I thought I'd take a break or something.. But seriously,if I do write something that's good I'll definitely post it and look forward to your comments!!!! Counting down to Aazadi???lol... Hope your exams were good!!
^hehe... yea ma xams r OVER! finally... i kinda get ur point cause i havent ritten something since QUITE sometime now and i have been feeling rite putting down some lines together but havent gotten the time... i guess i'll just do it right now and yea might just post it here...
This is fabulous. ... and what an irony, you posted this just one day before ... well similar stuff happening with me. PS: dude, if this is something that happend to you, I really feel it. I can feel you.
Moving on is the most simplest and the most difficult solution at the same time. If you know what I mean. Good one there buddy.
Yeah it did happen..no wonder you liked it...totally sucks man..sorry for you too..hope we do move on.
@elfascinating..i'm tempted to split your name into smaller words..forget it.. bad joke...: thanks elfascinating
Ohh..same here..that's why I chose that end... And now I use this to hide the pain...:dance: ..which doesn't help btw:dance:
