Missing U! Do Read It!

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by #iR@, Feb 2, 2006.

  1. #iR@


    hello everyone! another poem from me... and this one is really close to my heart. just finished riting it and thought i could get a response from u guys. i thinks it's simple and the rest i want u guys to decide... it is long but please do read it and don't forget to comment... so here goes...

     MISSING U!

    I miss the way u held me in the air
    Pretending I could fly

    I miss the way u got me candy
    In the middle of the night

    I miss the way u smiled at me
    When everything went wrong

    I miss the way u stood by me
    Once the world thought I was wrong

    I miss the way u made me laugh
    When I was already so low

    I miss the way u yelled at me
    When u knew it was not my fault

    I miss the way u messed with my guitar
    Pretending u could play

    I miss the way u were my audience
    Before every major competition that laid

    I miss the way u partied with ur friends
    When u knew I’d be waiting to open the door when u came

    I miss the way u yelled at me
    Before helping me with maths

    I miss the way u thought u would leave
    One fine day

    I miss the way u said “u won’t miss me”
    Even though u had tears in ur eyes

    I miss the way u waved at me
    Before u set off for ur real life

    I just hope u succeed in achieving
    Every goal of ur life
    Cause u r the one
    I care for
    From the deepness of my heart!

    thanks A LOT for reading:) and now don't forget to comment! looking forward to them! any advice, any suggestion, any thoughts...don't hesitate just rite it down! :cool:
    madhuresh and CrYpTiC_angel like this.
  2. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    for ur bro??

    i quite liked it :) very sweet..
  3. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Why can every single person write such wonderful poems but me :mad:
  4. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    m sure its for her bro....;-) ....................... nicely written dear ..... reps if allowed ....

    dude count me in also .... i cant write such stuff :eek::
  5. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    superb simple and pure ......
  6. born2tab

    born2tab rhythm guitarist

    :nw: mujhe apna shishya bana lo :nw:

    its awesome... :think:
  7. flyingbird

    flyingbird New Member

    it is really good
    it is also related with me and my bro
  8. #iR@


    @ cryptic.... yes it is for my bro! thanks for appreciating it gurl! oh and thanks for the reps too! :)

    @ d_ist_urb_ed ..... uuummmm...... i am sure everyone can rite! thanks for reading though!

    @ apurbajd... thanks a lot man! :) well... u should give it a try only then u can rite! hehe

    @ maghuresh... thanks for the reps man! ;) really mean a lot!

    @ born2tab... lol...Thanks a lot! :nw:

    @ flyingbird... aawww... i exactly know wat u r going through... thanks for the comments!:)
  9. Aka Oz

    Aka Oz /\K/\ - Ozy

    gooooooooood...i like it
  10. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Simply AWSOME.......................

    Awsome thts the only word that comes in my mind every time i read it................
    nice word slection and the secret is to keep it simple....

    M-azing...u r not such gandi bachchi yaar afterall.
  11. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    @IR, that's like saying everyone can play the guitar, well, everyone technically speaking can, but everyone doesnt cause only some are dedicated enough. Same thing, i probably could write if i worked on it, but nay, it doesnt come naturally to me.
  12. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    good work hira.. enjoyed reading it... keep up..

    man u do really miss him..
  13. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    very nice hira.. liked it..!
  14. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    sisters r the best in the world.....good poem written.......

    @ apu and dist, me also in ur list ...........
  15. #iR@


    @ aka oz... thanks for liking it man! :)

    @ walk_alone... thanks for the comments man! :nw: and yes i am NOT a gandi bachi! :annoyed: its a long story! :p:

    @ d_ist_urb_ed... well... to be very honest, i think if u feel that u should rite then u should definitly give it a shot! u will succeed!

    @ rizaaj... good to hear from u man! thanks for reading it! :) yea i do miss him a lot as in A LOT!

    @ nimisha.... thanks gurl! :)

    @ abhi... thanks man! :) well.... i'll say the same to u wat i just said to distubred...
  16. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    hmmmm....nice poem...i hvn't written anythng like that...i mean for my bro or for my family...cos i neva got a chance to b away from my family....
  17. #iR@


    @ garima..... thanks gurl! :) well... trust me u would never wanna be away from ur family!
  18. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    i liked this one...really...very sweet...:)
  19. #iR@


    @ hardik...THANKS A LOT MAN! :) this one came straight from the heart...

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