Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by walk_alone, Feb 21, 2006.

  1. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Today,My heart is heavy,
    and I can hardly breath;
    maybe today is the day,
    when I finally need to realise the truth.

    I waited for you,
    and hoped with all my might;
    maybe today is the day,
    when I need to "let it go".

    you have been a beautiful dream,
    a never ending love story;
    maybe today is the day,
    when I need to wake up.

    I bid you goodbye,
    and bow my head to thee;
    maybe today is the day,
    when I need to set you free.

    go my love and live your life,
    though its very hard to say;
    maybe today is the day'
    when I decide that I will never cross your way.

    (for the only one I ever loved)
  2. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    nicely written....hope u cross her way again..
  3. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    thxs Garima....not best of my poems but smthng i wrote and posted even before reading it again.
  4. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    no one interested in giving reviews :cry2:
  5. #iR@


    VERY NICELY DONE... really well ritten! keep it up man! i just hope u just start feeling better soon! keep riting man...:beer:
  6. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    casanova claiming to have written a poem for the only one he ever loved :eek::

    Liked it !! :)
  7. abhijeet_k

    abhijeet_k New Member

    well its really heart touch...
    deep 4m inside...

    keep it up....

  8. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    kyun Varshita ji...casanova ka dil nahi ho sakta....LOL
    i cant hide real me behind this stupid tag i gave myself...maybe just to feel gud abt myself.

    thxs for the review but.

  9. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    thxs abhijeet...maybe u have not read all my poems...they are of kinda same emotions.........thxs for the comments.

    u too hira.

  10. dij raj joshi

    dij raj joshi New Member

    hey ,
    truely speaking ur poem has touched me , i must say congratz to u for composing this poem , keep it up n i aspect some another good poems too.
  11. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**


    i thought i wdnever get any morecomments...thnxs mr.joshi...i appreciate ur time...and yes i have written poems far better than this one....maybe u can search for them in the thread.

    thxs again.

  12. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Good, good work, i wonder how i missed this one. Simple, but you manage to get your message across wholly.
  13. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    thxs dude.....simplicty is the essence of life.

  14. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    I would love for you to critique my your leisure...
  15. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Beautiful poem
    jus the right words a person should say
    and should be heard
    But hope things arent still at "Maybe"

    take care!
  16. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    This is lovely...

    !!! "let it go"..."if it comes back"..."then its yours" !!!
  17. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    thxs amit and bubly...............our lives are made up of lot of "maybe's and maybe not's" this situation wd always be there in one or other form its just abt selecting the right option.

    Disturbed....iwd certainly read ur poems and comment accordingly.

    thxs all.
  18. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    it all depends on the decisions a person makes!

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