mamma I dont feel, good in these shoes

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by madhuresh, Jan 7, 2007.

  1. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    Some times you feel it was the last but then wahts after the it dosents lasts long..!!

    Title: mamma I dont feel, good in these shoes

    Thought these are called the solders boot
    for they march the way which ever they choose..
    yes the guys tell they look good on me
    but mamma I dont feel, good in these shoes..


    its a heavy pair and rough form inside
    the laces keep on tightning, nails from the sides
    force me to walk for the bigger virtues
    but mamma I dont feel, good in these shoes..


    if the sole is the sole than its all worn out
    some how i just order but i can never shout
    i am softly strong, unable to refuse
    but mamma i dont feel, good in these shoes..
     
    i'm_not_neo and born2tab like this.
  2. born2tab

    born2tab rhythm guitarist

    tooooooooo different from ya style:shock: ...but n e ways too gud too:p:
     
  3. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    liked this poem.. its very different n nicely rhymed
    remembered same kinda thing i read in d past...

    Shoe Pain

    The shoes I bought don’t fit me, they were perfect at the store.
    But since I brought them home, they just don’t feel good anymore.

    I thought the sole annoyance was the problem in the sole.
    My heel that wouldn’t heal, though, soon began to take its toll.

    It then seemed my archenemy, the arch, caused all my woes,
    But that did not explain the pain I felt along my toes.

    Perhaps these etched-in letters make my shoes not fit too well.
    My left shoe has an R inscribed. My right shoe has an L.
     
  4. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    @nimisha.. the poem u talkin abt is jst a joke! wont say it's the same kind if poem as madhuresh's

    @madhuresh

    i kinda liked it, sm mistakes here n there but still a good effort
     
  5. zicky5608

    zicky5608 Power Shortage

    I think I had commented here. Where did the reply go?
     
  6. nazr

    nazr angel is my genital..

    ^Recycle bin




    Very nice poem. Different one as well.
     
  7. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    wow! dat was something different from wat u usually rite! must say it was something i enjoyed reading! nice flow! keep riting! :)
     
  8. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    thxxxxxxxx all
    and nimisha ji ya ...u r the forunm leader and u surely know the rules ..if i copied .... then do wht you shud ;) !
     
  9. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Wow this is one of those works which can be caegorized "much deeeper than it appears"...liked it a lot....keep coming with such "out of the way" stuff..


    "its a heavy pair and rough form inside
    the laces keep on tightning, nails from the sides
    force me to walk for the bigger virtues
    but mamma I dont feel, good in these shoes.."

    Says a lot...undoubted reps..
     
  10. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    I don't know whose written it but it's brilliant. The message is superb and so is the execution.

    madhuresh, I dont know what this controversy is but honestly, did you write it? I've seen you write some truly horrible poems yet I've seen some really good ones too so I'll believe you if you said you did and I like the way your mind works even if I've felt a bit repulsed at times.
     
  11. zicky5608

    zicky5608 Power Shortage

    Brilliant work dude. :) Thumbs up.

    @bjr
    Stop attacking poem forum.
     
  12. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening


    "attacking"?


    If you worked hard at poetry, you'd know what is needed and what isn't.
     
  13. zicky5608

    zicky5608 Power Shortage

    Uh dude i was jus jokin -.- Saw many of your replies at once =)

    Im not much into poetry...can appreciate em well enuff but writin em is outta question for me. I write rap :cool:
     
  14. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    since this thread is already talking about bjr takin over the poerty forums i don think i have to spam on any other thread! i mean WOW U R REPLYING TO LIKE EVERYYYYY POEM! but i aint complaining man... the comments u gave me U CAN DO WAETEVER U WANT! :dance: lol
     
  15. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    my bad, my apologies.

    It's a touchy point since a lot of people don't take critiques very well.
     
  16. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening


    haha, I've been getting bored out of my skull and I need to work on my English and written communication skills. What better way than an online forum? :)
     
  17. zicky5608

    zicky5608 Power Shortage

    @bjr
    Ma bad, forgot to add the smiley ;)

    ok, no more spam in a beautiful poem's thread
     
  18. one of the best frm the best !
    y dotn u reply ?
     
  19. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    yes maine likha...chori kar ke bhi kyaa milega...virtual world main thoughts chori karna ka kyaa fayada hai...aur jaha tak kharab likhne ki baat hai... accha bura is all perception ...i dont like pamela anderson, some day she will fall because of her (.)(.)..lol
    thanks:- ziky
    monica :- kyaa irada hai madam ! dont go on these poems and words they decive...
     

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