Let Me Live!

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by #iR@, Oct 5, 2005.

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  1. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    hello ppl...... here is another poem........ more like lyrics i guess:p anyway.... as i ALWAYS say... DO COMMENT! and all sorts of response is WELCOMED!!!!! so here it is................

    LET ME LIVE.....

    LET ME LIVE IN THIS WORLD,
    LET ME BREATH ON MY OWN,
    IT’S MY LIFE,
    I WANNA LIVE ON MY OWN,

    LET ME SEARCH THE SKIES,
    I WANNA FIND MY DREAMS,
    THAT I HAVE DREAMT,
    I WANNA LIVE MY LIFE,
    CAUSE IT’S MINE,

    LET ME SEARCH THE SPACE,
    I WANNA FIND THE STARS I LOOKED AT,
    I WANNA KEEP THEM WID ME FOREVER,
    I WANNA HOLD THEM TIGHT,
    AND KEEP THEM WID ME FOREVER,

    LET ME LIVE ON MY OWN,
    I WANNA HOLD THE STARS,
    I WANNA FIND MY DREAMS,
    I WANNA LIVE…
    I WANNA LIVE ON MY OWN!


    don't forget to comment!!!!!!
     
    #iR@, Oct 5, 2005
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  2. bobbit_uncut

    bobbit_uncut Banned


    Wasn't that a little dumb? I almost felt i was listening to a bawling kid instead of reading a poem.
     
    bobbit_uncut, Oct 5, 2005
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  3. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    ^hahaha...... ya man could be in UR opinion......... chalo atleast i get a negative response from someone!!!!!!!!!!! :eek:: thanks for reading though.......... :cool:
     
    #iR@, Oct 5, 2005
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  4. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    lolz.. thats cool.. looks like a rap intro of a song.. it will sound good if sung.. wont it..
     
    rizaaj, Oct 5, 2005
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  5. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    ^ thanks rizaaj......

    anymore comments OF ANY SORT..........ppl???????
     
    #iR@, Oct 5, 2005
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  6. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Nice poem....evn i feel the same sometimes...most of the times :eek:: neva tried to express in a poem though, but this was a nice try from u.
     
    Garima, Oct 5, 2005
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  7. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Hira hai Sada kay liye......... (Diamonds are Forever) ;)

    Nice work babe..
     
    BubblyMartini, Oct 5, 2005
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  8. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ garima..... thanks ....... always looking forward for a response from u.......

    @ bubbly ....... thanks........... heera nahi hai it's hira. :p: ........ LOL...... thanks
    anyways.......... thanks a lot.......

    always looking forward to a response from both of u.,.......^^

    more commets ppl???????
     
    #iR@, Oct 5, 2005
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  9. the_wizard

    the_wizard Omega == God

    loved it...brilliant stuff

    btw wats the diff betn hira and heera??
     
    the_wizard, Oct 6, 2005
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  10. jekyll

    jekyll Banned

    hmmm

    seems very refined n toned down version of aggresive lyrics found in grunge

    good but u cuudve made it more aggresive :aggre: n rough
    :)
     
    jekyll, Oct 6, 2005
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  11. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ wizard........ THANKS MAN.........

    @ jekyll........... mmmmmm........... wasn't agressive that day...... wanted to right something dreamy... LOL........ thanks anyway!

    any more comments ppl??????
     
    #iR@, Oct 6, 2005
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  12. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ wizard........ the difference between hira and heera is....... is FIRSTLY the meaning is different.,...... and secondly the pronounceation is different too...... :cool: anyother question man? :p
     
    #iR@, Oct 6, 2005
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  13. hate_eternal

    hate_eternal Banned

    Nice one. Rebellious kind of a poem. Trying to break free.

    Keep up the good work.
     
    hate_eternal, Oct 6, 2005
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  14. death angel

    death angel the messenger from hell

    lol!!!! well said
     
    death angel, Oct 6, 2005
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  15. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ death_angel................ mmmmmmm....... no thanks! lol

    anything else??????
     
    #iR@, Oct 6, 2005
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  16. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ hate.......... THANKS MAN!
     
    #iR@, Oct 6, 2005
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  17. Rude_gal:)

    Rude_gal:) New Member

    hmmmmmmm........okay
     
    Rude_gal:), Oct 6, 2005
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  18. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ rude_gal......... :think: wat shall i say........ :think: ..... thanks for the honest opinion! :eek:: ;)


    any more replies.......??????????
     
    #iR@, Oct 6, 2005
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  19. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    wait jani.. u will receive a reply soon.. dont be hastty
     
    rizaaj, Oct 6, 2005
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  20. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    JANI?????? :shock:
     
    #iR@, Oct 6, 2005
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