Hey guys...this is my first post on the hindi forum and my first attempt at writing hindi lyrics.........think that i have done a good job lookin forward to some coments................and critique.........i am waiting Chup hum rahe Kuch naa kahe Dil phir sune yeh khamoshiah Baithen rahe yuhi khoye rahe tumme Paagal kare yeh madhoshiah Yuhi mulakate hoti rahe Chahe bhi aur kya hum iske siva Jaane kahaa se hum aaye hain Jaane kahaa ko hum jaayenge Dil yeh ise hai kuch naa pataa Kaise ise hum samjhayenge Chup hum rahe Kuch naa kahe Dil phir sune yeh khamoshiah Baithen rahe yuhi khoye rahe tumme Paagal kare yeh madhoshiah Yuhi mulakate hoti rahe Chalta rahe yeh silsila Har pal tumhe hum dekha kare Rahe tera chehra har pal saamne Dil yeh ise par nahi hai pataa Ke dhalne laga hai yeh tere pyaar mein
hey...not bad...i dun think i could ever write something like this lol...it sounds like a typical b-wood song...in the sense that it sounds like something, well the ideas/thoughts in it, seem like something ud find in a movie...that's a compliment...i guess...for the sake of critique: the lines 'jaane kahaa se hum aaye hain/jaane kahaa ko hum jaayenge' are good...u need the 'ko' for the meter but it sounds a bit out of place...a bit abrupt..oh well...
