It's With You

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Rey1970, Sep 17, 2005.

  1. Rey1970

    Rey1970 New Member

    There is pain,
    In your eyes,
    I put it there,
    And although,
    I said I care,
    My actions,
    Laid elsewhere.
    There are tears
    On your face,
    And although,
    You can't be replaced,
    My incentive,
    Was the chase.
    There is sorrow
    In your voice,
    And although,
    I try to walk away,
    It's with you
    I want to stay.
  2. ssslayer

    ssslayer Banned

    gud ,,, i especially like the small length of stanzas ...

    reminds me of many Pearl Jam's songs ...

    anyway am checking out the liknk in the end ... they have a similar kinda poems there ... :think:

    u the same person?
  3. Rey1970

    Rey1970 New Member

    Yes I'm, thanks......
  4. ssslayer

    ssslayer Banned

    n u play guitar also?

    but there is no mention of it in the website :think: ...

    b.t.w. how did u land up on this site?
  5. Rey1970

    Rey1970 New Member

    My husband plays guitar.......He told me of this poetry I just share my wrk wth u 'll...thanks.
  6. ssslayer

    ssslayer Banned

    hey! ...
    i gues iremember Rey1970 - he used to post in guitar related threads n forums ...

    whatever happned to him?
  7. Rey1970

    Rey1970 New Member

    he's around........wrk , kids,volunteer katrina.....all tied up these mnts.
  8. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    nice poem rey
  9. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    hmmmm.....good!.....sounds some thing like rap rock kinda......but its good!
  10. cYpHeR

    cYpHeR Banned

    very well written
  11. Rey1970

    Rey1970 New Member

    Glad you guys liked it.......thanks

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