Na zikr karo unka na baat kisi gair ki ho Khamoshiya hi rehna do is baar mera dil toota hai Hai kise chah roshni ki ye shama kis ne jalayi hai Taarikhiyo ko chahne do is baar mera toota hai Ek umeed dil mein basayi thi ab baki nahi hai kuch bhi Tanha ziist guzar ne do is baar mera dil toota hai Bohot uthaye naaz unke aur sahi saari ghutkiya bhi Humse na ab koi aas rakho is baar mera dil toota hai Apno ne humein thukraya hai gair bhala apnaye kyu Mat pucho mujhse haal mera is baar mera dil toota hai Kyu mangu kisi se main panaah kyu jau kisi ki chokhat pe Aey rab tujhi se hai gila ke is baar mera dil toota hai Aasaar mere samje na mere gam ki hadh jaani Ab talab nahi baaki koi mehfil ki is baar mera dil toota hai Na udaao meri yuh hassi na dekho aisi nazro se Main sach kehti hu tumse is baar mera dil toota hai Piya nahi jaata hai mujhe se ayyaam ki is talkhi ko Lahed mein mujhe ab so jaane do is baar mera dil toota hai Dil ke har ek tukde se yahi ek sadaa aati hai Rakh do kalam ko bas ab tum is baar mera dil toota hai
bahut badhiya.... kiski itni himmat ki aapka dil tod de. hamen bhi mauke dee jiye,ham hi fevicol se jod de. jokes apart.... i liked it
Piya nahi jaata hai mujhe se ayyaam ki is talkhi ko Lahed mein mujhe ab so jaane do is baar mera dil toota hai last lines and actually all lines r beautifull ....reps added....actually mere ko issliye bhi acchi lagi .....cause bhahi loog ke saath bhi kuch aisa hi hoone ja raha hai
main vahi karuunga jiss se ki, vo palat ke mujh ko na dhekhe bass dil ko samjhana baki hai iss baar mere dil toote ga..!
sometimes i criticise u for the repetitiveness in ur poems.. but here the style appears good.. its great dollie.. btw.. hope u r fine.. not seen you since ages..!
^^^i think she will.. she has awesome vocabulary.. plus she writes devotional poems too.. just pm her..
@ thnx walk-alone @thnx madhuresh @aur nims. tumhare coments se to bohot darr lagta hai so i think twice befor posting my poem par thank god es baar koi aisa waisa comment nahi mila.. thnx honey :nw:
