if i..would you?

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nandy0894, Sep 12, 2011.

  1. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    if i luk at you so lovingly would you stare me back into my eyes
    if i smile at you in my best look would you look at me and also smile..
    if i hug you tight.. take you in my arms would you hug me back for a while..
    if i feel your lips under my fingertips wOuld you drop you ego and swallow in that bile..
    if i walk upto you and say hi..would you walk with me that one extra mile..
    if i am sad would you take me with you and we'll have some wine..
    if i love you so much on all the days would you love me back and forever be mine..
     
  2. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    lovey dovey stuff eh?
     
  3. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    lol..yep..my first intentional try at penning down something romantic.. :p
     
  4. I will .. !! lol ...the lines are sweet ...



    if u wish...add some more and make it fabilous !!!
     
  5. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member


    haha :D
    thank you ^_^
    nd i did try to make it longer..but wasn't relly able to..u suggest?
     
  6. if i luk at you so lovingly would you stare me back into my eyes
    if i smile at you in my best look would you look at me and also smile..
    if i hug you tight.. take you in my arms would you hug me back for a while..
    if i feel your lips under my fingertips wOuld you drop you ego and swallow in that bile..
    if i walk upto you and say hi..would you walk with me that an extra mile..
    if i am sad would you take me with you and we'll have some wine..
    if i love you so much on all the days would you love me back and forever be mine..
    These if’s i have, so many of them,
    And i sometimes count, in my endless nights
    These if’s i have, so cozy are they
    And i amuse with them, in tough times
    These ifs i have, so shy are they
    And i, keep them abreast on my bumpy rides
    These ifs are mine like my soft toys
    On the nectar of my faith these things survive
    These ifs are real, and i don’t know ‘bout you
    So i will do everything to keep the if’s alive...
    ....'ll do anything to keep the if's alive..
     
  7. ^ now looks complete... wht say ..??
     
  8. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    looks like 2 poems have been merged...
     
  9. nope ... if we put a few dots between the place where she left and i started will do the job..

    if i am sad would you take me with you and we'll have some wine..
    if i love you so much on all the days would you love me back and forever be mine..
    ..............................................................
    ......................................................................................

    These if’s i have, so many of them,
    And i sometimes count, in my endless nights
    These if’s i have, so cozy are they


    ??
     
  10. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    Doesn't help...anyways that was my view... 2 cents !
     
  11. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    oooohh....they do not seem like they are in continuation...
    but i liked it.. :D its cute.. ^_^
     
  12. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    hey I hadn't read it yet...its cute, to say!
    finally something happy to read. Its very difficult to write down this mood, more-so intentionally.
    good job!
     
  13. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thank you :)
     
  14. guitarplayer729

    guitarplayer729 New Member

    where is alpha????


    nice one btw
    and yes to all those questions
     
  15. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    whats with you and alpha.. are you guys seeing each other?
     
  16. alpha1

    alpha1 I BLUES!

    Let me spell out the answers:
    1.No
    2.No
    3.Only if you wear something flimsy
    4.If you use soap after visiting loo
    5.Only if I am not tired with the soccer match
    6.Perhaps, if fireworks happen later ...
    7.Why do you girls always bring in love and mush everywhere? (even during the "fireworks")

    α ♂

    Actually if he was "seeing me" ... he won't ask such questions ...
     
  17. guitarplayer729

    guitarplayer729 New Member

    +1
    and nice answers sir

    btw did anyone wish nandy happy bday
     
  18. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

  19. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

  20. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member


    thank you :)
     

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