i remember ..

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nandy0894, Feb 16, 2012.

  1. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    i remember my father putting me to bed with careful hands and doting eyes
    i remember him being away from the big bad world of shrewdness, rudeness and lies
    running his fingers through my hair .. his hands felt as light as a feather
    and while i slept he whispered into my ear that he would leave his sweet angel never.
    i remember waking up in the morning..still in the shadows of his strong arms
    all i needed to hear his wind chime voice to get up.. i needed no shrill alarms
    he would tickle me and pull me up and he would tell me about the bright sun rising in the sky
    but i still wanting to sleep some more would bang my fists and legs and raise such a hue and cry
    and then he would suddenly lift me up on his shoulders and i would sleep so peacefully lying on his back
    and he would put me down when i could barely open my eyes , holding my hand he would guide me round the track.
    finally all ready now with a clean and fresh face .. he would make me delicious breakfast
    making me sit in his lap .. despite all my tantrums..he would make me eat so lovingly till the last
    he would run with me, would push my bicycle, would kick the ball ..i felt like a queen when he lifted me up and swung me high
    and i would laugh so loud and he would smile so broad..and he would play with me till i lost my breath and on that ground i used to lie.
    then we walked back home so slowly..watching the trees and the beautiful birds chirping loud going back to their home with us
    at this time..i am so exhausted..i walk fast..sometimes even run to match his pace .. but for a change without making no fuss..
    when school teachers taught me i felt so bored and i yawned all through the class ..teachers din' pay attention ..they had so much to do
    but when he sat with me with my books .. he taught me like some magician and i would listen with eyes wide open..and i would revise attentively all the way through.
    and after an hour or two we would play again
    come back home, tired..we would cross the same lanes
    then he would make me eat some food and he would put me to bed at my third yawn in a row
    and he would make me close my eyes and make me dream of the peaceful rivers that flow
    he pampered me like a baby yet made me strong as a soldier .. singing to me the lullabies all dedicated to an angel , a doll or sometimes a princess
    he would run his fingers through my hair and i would sleep in his arms with a mouth lil open and hug him back tight cause i knew even in my sleep that this love is priceless..
     
  2. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    haha..knew it..that no one would reply..
     
  3. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    why do you think no one will?
     
  4. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    coz ..for one .. this does not seem like poetry..others will try to sympathize. .and the rest won't find the words to do so..
    any way now that u did reply..umm ..your comments?
     
  5. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    They'll come. In the meantime, enjoy your "wow no wrds to describe u so gd".
     
  6. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member


    lol ..what was that ? :p
     
  7. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    just a reflection of what this section seems to have come down to. not many people seem to have anything to say about what other people have written.
     
  8. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    that is why i asked for comments sir .. not compliments :)
     
  9. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    which is why I said in the meantime....
     
  10. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    I don't think anyone can comment on stuff like this...
     
  11. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member


    oook ..nyways..thanku :)
     
  12. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    many ... manyyyyy people can..
     
  13. Vader

    Vader New Member

    Good job :)
     
  14. sometimes one writes and just droll out words ... poetry gets shaped on its own the reason to it is that what one is describing is soo touching that it does not need any meters ... thats how ur lines are ... to me words are just a medium the connect to the thought / feeling is what expressions are all about

    very neatly written poetry !!
     
  15. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    :) thanks a lot
     
  16. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thanku :)
     
  17. wylder

    wylder New Member

    Hey nandy, nice poem.

    You have always got very nice flow of ideas in your writing. And you always have a lot of very good content too.
     
  18. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    i am floored.. haha..thanks a ton :) btw you too .. :)
     
  19. Rocean

    Rocean New Member

    This is a free flowin poetry...No rythm no rhyme bt sure does show the love of a fathr n his daughter thru her eyes... Awesmly written... : )
     
  20. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member



    i hope it does.. :)
    thank you :)
     

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