Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by CrYpTiC_angel, Dec 14, 2005.

  1. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    It's important to me that you should know what made me write this poem:

    I was online the other day, chatting on messenger, but I had an end-sem exam the other day and was supposed to be studying. My mom heard me typing n started shouting frm the other room, so I quickly disconnected and said I was typing up a new poem so she cooled down. And in five minutes flat i had a poem ready to show her :grin:
    I couldnt think if what to write abt and suddenly remebered vini's poem abt her niece.. so i wrote abt a new born baby :)
    and as it was written in a hurry, it's kinda.. whatever... u decide..

    And now, here's the poem (finally :grin: )


    Fresh out of your mother's womb
    You look around with innocent eyes
    You smile not knowing what all
    Happens under these bright blue skies

    Your world is pure
    Hatred is non-existant there
    From greed and jealousy
    For now you are spared

    You clasp your fingers around my finger
    As a tear flows down my cheek
    You almost look as if you understand
    As if, of beauty and hope, you want to speak

    For the moments I spend with you
    I feel peaceful and warm
    While the cruel world rests in oblivion
    I sew together the dreams that were torn

    You may not know who I really am
    But you fill me up with hope
    The pessimist in me dies slowly
    As I breathe again and learn to cope
    zoomingrocket and apurbajd like this.
  2. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    that touched me.... :eek::
    it brings tears in my eyes.... :cry1:

    well written...
  3. the_wizard

    the_wizard Omega == God

    u wrote tht in 5 mins :shock:

    nice one....
  4. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!


    really? wow... thnx....


    yup, 5 mins.. thnx :)
  5. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    Poem like that in 5 min???? :shock: :shock:

    tussi gr8 ho yaar!
  6. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    lol.. thnx : )
  7. can_i_play

    can_i_play New Member

    Nice work.......
    do listen to song "mere ghar aayi ek nanhiii parii" from kabhi kabhi ....
    on the same lines....
    But might have taken days to pen it down...
  8. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    wow....after dayz..itz come.....i just love this gal,..bole to this gal ka poems...really good ones....CA,if i get time someday,im gonna make a file of all ya poems and gonna get them printed......i m in love with ya poems,...do keep writn.......

    PSST PSST:: never study for SEMESTERS.......and alternative way to make ur mom think u r studyin is .........keep up a word document open and wen she comes open it and tell u r workin on a project and doin typin work...its been my idea...the devils mind never stops...................
  9. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    i thnk u posted ur poem aftr a long time.......good to c a good stuff from u...yet again
    hv to spread reps:annoyed:
  10. shak

    shak Harrr!

    5 minutes!!! either you are too good or you have discovered how to use relativity to slow the time down .. einstien would have been proud if it was the second bit .. but since we all know its the first case .. so ma hat's off to you trish!! really nicely done ..
    P.S: you still not studying!! haha .. u were the same when i last saw ya on msn ..way to go girl make me proud :p ..
  11. tumhare_divya

    tumhare_divya luvs 2 luv...lives 2 luv

    excellent poem trish...unlike myself and some other poets you are not notorious for certain poetry topics...(like for me...friendship...sorrow...love..love...and making love. :p: ..)...you have such great variety in your poems topics!!!...and yu do a good job always... :beer: :rock:
  12. #iR@


    EXCELLENT!!!!!!!! u rote it in 5 mins!!!!! :shock:
  13. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    thnx :) yeah, i mught've heard that song, but dont rem.. will check it out for sure..

    and earn lotsa money for stuff i've written!! :mad: :p:
    thnx :)
    lol.. no projects as yet, my mom's not stoopid.. lol
    but i smtimes pretend that i'm workin on C++ :p: but doesnt always work :annoyed:

    cant really help it... :grin:
    i'd do anythng but study! :p


    thnx a lot :) :) :)
  14. wolfblitz

    wolfblitz New Member

    awesome poem and finally something a lil cheerful from u.
    nevertheless i cant figure out what prompted u to write about babies,maybe PMS?
    LOL just kiddin
  15. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    aw..........how i hated C and C++ wen i was in my second yr :phbbt: ......i even earned a KT for C....... :p: cleared it though.... :)
  16. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    Can i get tutorials from you Trish....like a class on "How-to-write-a-beautiful-poem-in-5-mins".... :p: :)
  17. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    ^^^sure.. if u can afford it :p:
  18. sweetie

    sweetie New Member

    awesome..Its just too good my dear...It is a wonderful feeling thou which you have expressed in 5mins...hats off to you..:rock:

    Quietly now ponder
    Could this child be me
    Free of all the worry
    Heart's peace so endlessly

    Smile that sets the starlight
    Will fill the heart with love
    Peaceful place we enter
    Like softest clouds above

    Silence in the joyfulness
    Healing time to stay

    Gently close your eyes now
    Feel the love combine
    Peace joy and tranquility
  19. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    wow.. u rock!

    And thanks for takin time out to dig out my poems :) and for the complement as well!
  20. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    wooww...logo ne sab kuch bol diya...mere liye choda hi kuch nahi:eek::

    ...just a sweet rose for you...

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