help me out guys!! feedback maybe

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by varmas11, Jan 12, 2005.

  1. varmas11

    varmas11 New Member

    jean jacques rousseau said truly right
    of mankind's worldly, inherent plight
    man is free, yet everywhere in chains
    in this societal quagmire, how does one stay sane
    from society's opressing, incessant armada
    makes me wanna leave Earth, perhaps to andromeda
    into the galaxy of peace, love, and right
    where things are done willfully, instead of in fright
    where stress is placed on true unity
    instead of an illusory duality


    yo guys... i have 2 or 3 more verses... i'm just not remembering them right now... i'll post them quite soon though
     
  2. maverick8218

    maverick8218 New Member

    Wow ! you have included a rousseau quote in ur poem! Thats a very innovative way of writing poetry. Am waiting for the remaining stanzas.
     

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