HELLWARD HO! (my 5th poem)

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by vini, Oct 12, 2005.

  1. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    this is real soon..here is my 5th poem..i've just written it in 8-10 minutes..and dont be too startled with the excessive rhyming i've done..coz i have pressed upon total rhyming here.. :)



    Hearken Darkness, you dont scare me
    Hearken Pain, please just tear me
    Hearken Despair, never spare me
    Hearken Satan, just face me and dare me
    Hearken Blood, want you to smear me
    Hearken Hell, you did forebear me
    So i make way to a wayward void
    Hearken Sin, wont you prepare me?


    im not askin in particular for feedback coz i think this poem is too transcendental and abstract to be commented upon :shock:

    but if u think u can get the feel..then do gimme a feedback :)
    akkyy21 and CrYpTiC_angel like this.
  2. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    oh i get the feel alright! i totally 'get' it...

    this one's now my fav frm all ur poems...

    awesome.. keep it up!
  3. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    OK..this 1 is surely abstract

    only 1 reply :shock:

    and this surely discourages me2 write any further..really ;) hihi
  4. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    sounds like a kiddo poem!.....btw.....wats hearken?neither is it so abstract to me!
  5. jekyll

    jekyll Banned

    hey can i use these lyrix, they will fit into any metal song perfectly :grin:
    really as verse
    now u need to come up with one more as second verse

    for chorus i can put any horse schit woth growling ... an lo ... u have a metal song ready
  6. akkyy21

    akkyy21 #%@!$&

    Rock n roll babaeeeeeeeee!!!! Reps for u!!
  7. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    thanx everyone!

    @Jekyll: its gifted 2u for free..but do send me the audio when ur done using these


    Hearken means listen or give heed..so now u know y u found it a kiddo poem..coz u urself r one

    a kiddo..i mean ;)
  8. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    vini pie, u really write nice poems.....
  9. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    thanx manjrekar bhai :)

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