Brightness of a hundred suns, and yet you never shone below; And you laugh at our darkness instead, here still, the candle casts a brighter glow. You've made a star cast a lengthy shadow, and the sun shine a subdued flame. You've never seen the clouds beneath, for your faults you pass the blame. You've worn the crown above your head, and your clothes wear a wealthy name. But never passed your old man's door, his eyes, to you, a wall of shame. Their moistened eyes have found no heed, your words of hate have made them weep. But you shall'nt last long enough, and suffer you shall, for you never keep. What need they do, for your worldly gains, For your life and wisdom, bound in chains. With thoughts so shallow, chins so high, and scornful words, and cold derides. In hurt and centrism, they'll never bend, They're heads in pride, meant to offend.
i feel this ws good attempt ... i odnt knw hw i missed it ...but i cnat understand the whole thing ...i got it in parts ..may be im dumb ..care to explain??
its only bout ppl who think, or really are wise, but dont share their expreriences or wisdom, instead use it to bully upon others... such ppl really are a waste of space....only like to offend others I hate them! think of elder realatives, or even my seniors on ship were like that...which is whom i dedicated this poem to, when i wrote it......
1st thing ... i dont buy your ship story...and also its hard to belive ur a male species from ur way of writing 2nd the poem is awsome ...will u try some thing in hindi or urdu.... would love to read ur writing 3rd i will definatly tell my views on all poems posted by you...
You see, its a tendency for sailors to bully upon juniors, not to mention the fact tht they like to pass on their blame upon them, its not quite my nature to see or do things like tht... n lol tht u still blieve my poems are feminine...cant help, though, i write like tht hindi seems tough, not cuz of language, bt coz its too revealing, m comfy wid english since I can put 2-3 hidden meanings in a single line, which wud mean different to different ppl....i like to do tht..... n thanks again...
