Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nimisha, Feb 13, 2007.

  1. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    on this valentine day..
    to my love..


    'Rapture' is not THE word,
    nor 'Ecstasy' is emphatic enough..
    too infinitesimal to delineate this moment.
    so better this charisma lay bare!
    undressed, to be felt only deep within
    naked, not to be described, swathed in words..
    let the desire rule
    in aquiescence to virgin pleasure,
    the zeal pulsating in veins,
    transceding with every beat..summoned to enthrall..
    outcry of bliss! smirk of pain!
    as enigmatic as it could get..
    is this eternity? is this heaven?
    fantacy? truth? illusion?
    hushhhh.. now
    no paronyms are asked..
    at altar of love, Two soul entranced.
    madhuresh likes this.
  2. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    wah !
    mast poem and superb feelings ...apna cell no. dena... ;)
    reps added !
  3. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Very nicely written...though I love simple poems this one was genuinely in need of a good,expressive language.. the words are the key in this poem..taking it beyond simply magnificent and making it entrancing indeed..
    This is how love should be.
  4. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Insert glossary
  5. shanky666_

    shanky666_ New Member

    good one.
    u r gettin there.... see u there.
  6. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    Can I be you? I try so hard yet am but a poor man imitation.

    You crack me up :-*

    quite honestly, the mood struck me more as that of ex-love rather than love. Melancholic rather than ecstatic.
  7. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    ^^ thanks for d honest opinion.
  8. #iR@


    now dats wat i call original... GOOD JOB GURL! :)
  9. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    i meant what i meant when i said what i said

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