Ehsaas... un lamho ka

This is my 100th post and i wanted it to be special.
I dunno if this is my best so far... but yes... this is definately the closest to my heart. Tried to sum up the most special moment of my life...

This poem is dedicated to that person who has loved me selflessly....I couldnt have found a better medium to say.. "I love you"... no matter wat the situation will be tommorow.

Would like to thank Notty... for helping me with the title. Thank you buddy for being there !!


Kuch darre darre se hum , aur kuch darre darre se tum the
Aur humare beech khamoshi ke silsile the
Jee bhar ke tujhe dekh rahi thi mein
Jab uljhe tum mere sawalon mein the
Kehne ko bahut tha lekin kuch keh na pa rahe the
Har guzarte lamhe se woh mere kareeb aa rahe the
Kuch kadmo ke faasle pe hi to tum khade the
Us faasle ko tay karne se hum ghabra rahe the

Jab dastak di mene dil pe unke, woh hairaan se khade the
Aakar sambhal lo mujhko… jaise ankhon se keh rahe the
Kadamo ko rokna chaha mene par woh ruk kaha rahe the
Zamaane se bekhabar woh chale ja rahe the
Haar kar apne aap se jab hum hosh khone lage
Saari bandisho ko tod, fikr chod chale the
Baahon mein uski jab muh chupa ke hum ro rahe the
Dhadkano mein uski jaise madh hosh ho rahe the

Uski ek chubhan se woh ehsaas jag rahe the
Mere pyar ki sej pe humare khwaab saj rahe the
Mere maathe ko woh choomna, baalon ke sehlana,
Apni baahon mein bhar kar saari duniya bhulana
Hum ek doosre ki baahon mein kho jo rahe the
Do jism ek jaan ho rahe the

Dosti chod ek nayi raah chal pade the
Sachai juthla hum pyar karne chale the
Jaane kitne barso se uska raasta hum tak rahe the
Sapno ko hakeeqat mein badalte dekh rahe the
Ek raat hi ke liye sahi, hum apni khwahishe jeena chah rahe the
Unhi chand lamho mein apni zindagi jiye ja rahe the… jiye ja rahe the

 

First things first .. AWESOME POEM .. Hats off to u .. Juz shows da depth of ur feelings behind them .. Man I'm lucky i read this poem da first .. n it was a pleasure helpin u find da topic ..

 

I m glad i had the discussion abt the title with u... otherwise i wud have come up with a crappy one.
Thank you so much !

By the way notty... if this poem was my 100th post... your reply to it was your 500th post ...this is too special !! :beer:

chalo ji shagun pai gaya... this is the 101 post.,....dont worry i wont count after this...lol

 

Wow... thats really way deep...
Excellent poem!

Keep it up.. and keep writing

REgards,
Zooom..!!

 

ur guy is really lucky to have u...............aawwww........y aint me in delhi and y aint me a bit tall......** goes for the pull up exercise again ** ....but nice poem varshi......

 

Style awesome and content really touchy. Very well done!

There is a smooth flow of emotions from top to bottom but at one place i find it little out-of-touch. See the following lines...

Baahon mein uski jab muh chupa ke hum ro rahe the
Dhadkano mein uski jaise madh hosh ho rahe the

ro rahe the....and then madh hosh rahe the....

Dont you think that these two emotions are not gelling well together.

But anyway, good poem indeed.

 

@ zooming... thank you

@abhi... :RollLol: at ur pull up excercise

@amit... i do get wat ur trying to say... but the scene dat i had in mind... it fitted perfectly well... thank you !!

 

:think: By the way... this one truly deserves a rep... dont u guys think so ?? :think:

 

what is that scene :dance:

 

well... dats my lil secret

 

ha ha well i have sung this poem in the tune of ek taraf hum aur tum they by abhishek bachhan gels well with it
well jokes apart its a nice poem i am going to read some more and post my reviews to it

 

Thanks for the music direction !!
Maybe you can share it here with us??... i mean ur recording

 

well i can but im looking for someone who can sing talk 2 me .......... in the background hey anyways guys pls comment on my poem too i have just got one reply thats bad :-(

 

its an art to reveal secret in mystereous way...

 

yes it does...reps given :beer:
took me a lot of time to read that...but it was worth the effort...u write b-e-a-utifully... :nw:

 

Wat else do you think this poem is all about??

 

@ hardik...
Thank you... both for calling it b-e-a-utiful !! (bruce almighty way... and for the reps ( which helped me to get me the second green dot)

 

its missing that mystereous look

 

@amit... yah ... sorry .... its rather too obvious wat its all about

 

finally someone knows its that...
n for the green dot,can u tell me how many points do i increase : ...(u can pm me that)...just curious