Ehsaas... un lamho ka

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Varshita, Jan 28, 2006.

  1. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    This is my 100th post and i wanted it to be special.
    I dunno if this is my best so far... but yes... this is definately the closest to my heart. Tried to sum up the most special moment of my life...

    This poem is dedicated to that person who has loved me selflessly....I couldnt have found a better medium to say.. "I love you"... no matter wat the situation will be tommorow.

    Would like to thank Notty... for helping me with the title. Thank you buddy for being there !! :)

    Kuch darre darre se hum , aur kuch darre darre se tum the
    Aur humare beech khamoshi ke silsile the
    Jee bhar ke tujhe dekh rahi thi mein
    Jab uljhe tum mere sawalon mein the
    Kehne ko bahut tha lekin kuch keh na pa rahe the
    Har guzarte lamhe se woh mere kareeb aa rahe the
    Kuch kadmo ke faasle pe hi to tum khade the
    Us faasle ko tay karne se hum ghabra rahe the

    Jab dastak di mene dil pe unke, woh hairaan se khade the
    Aakar sambhal lo mujhko… jaise ankhon se keh rahe the
    Kadamo ko rokna chaha mene par woh ruk kaha rahe the
    Zamaane se bekhabar woh chale ja rahe the
    Haar kar apne aap se jab hum hosh khone lage
    Saari bandisho ko tod, fikr chod chale the
    Baahon mein uski jab muh chupa ke hum ro rahe the
    Dhadkano mein uski jaise madh hosh ho rahe the

    Uski ek chubhan se woh ehsaas jag rahe the
    Mere pyar ki sej pe humare khwaab saj rahe the
    Mere maathe ko woh choomna, baalon ke sehlana,
    Apni baahon mein bhar kar saari duniya bhulana
    Hum ek doosre ki baahon mein kho jo rahe the
    Do jism ek jaan ho rahe the

    Dosti chod ek nayi raah chal pade the
    Sachai juthla hum pyar karne chale the
    Jaane kitne barso se uska raasta hum tak rahe the
    Sapno ko hakeeqat mein badalte dekh rahe the
    Ek raat hi ke liye sahi, hum apni khwahishe jeena chah rahe the
    Unhi chand lamho mein apni zindagi jiye ja rahe the… jiye ja rahe the
  2. notty_lad

    notty_lad sudo undress

    First things first .. AWESOME POEM .. Hats off to u .. Juz shows da depth of ur feelings behind them .. Man I'm lucky i read this poem da first .. n it was a pleasure helpin u find da topic .. :)
  3. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    I m glad i had the discussion abt the title with u... otherwise i wud have come up with a crappy one.
    Thank you so much ! :)

    By the way notty... if this poem was my 100th post... your reply to it was your 500th post ...this is too special !! :beer:

    chalo ji shagun pai gaya... this is the 101 post.,....dont worry i wont count after
  4. zoomingrocket

    zoomingrocket TeChNiCaL AdMiNiStRaToR

    Wow... thats really way deep...
    Excellent poem!

    Keep it up.. and keep writing ;)

  5. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    ur guy is really lucky to have u...............aawwww........y aint me in delhi and y aint me a bit tall......** goes for the pull up exercise again ** ....but nice poem varshi......
  6. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    Style awesome and content really touchy. Very well done!

    There is a smooth flow of emotions from top to bottom but at one place i find it little out-of-touch. See the following lines...

    Baahon mein uski jab muh chupa ke hum ro rahe the
    Dhadkano mein uski jaise madh hosh ho rahe the

    ro rahe the....and then madh hosh rahe the....

    Dont you think that these two emotions are not gelling well together.

    But anyway, good poem indeed.
  7. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    @ zooming... thank you :)

    @abhi... :RollLol: at ur pull up excercise

    @amit... i do get wat ur trying to say... but the scene dat i had in mind... it fitted perfectly well... thank you !! :)
  8. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    :think: By the way... this one truly deserves a rep... dont u guys think so ?? :think:
    amit82cse likes this.
  9. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    what is that scene :dance:
  10. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    well... dats my lil secret :)
  11. write2madhur

    write2madhur dowdiegeekgizmofreak

    ha ha well i have sung this poem in the tune of ek taraf hum aur tum they by abhishek bachhan gels well with it
    well jokes apart its a nice poem i am going to read some more and post my reviews to it
  12. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    Thanks for the music direction !!
    Maybe you can share it here with us??... i mean ur recording ;)
  13. write2madhur

    write2madhur dowdiegeekgizmofreak

    well i can but im looking for someone who can sing talk 2 me .......... in the background hey anyways guys pls comment on my poem too i have just got one reply thats bad :-(
  14. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    its an art to reveal secret in mystereous way... :cool:
  15. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    yes it does...reps given :beer:
    took me a lot of time to read that...but it was worth the effort...u write b-e-a-utifully... :nw:
  16. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    Wat else do you think this poem is all about??
  17. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    @ hardik...
    Thank you... both for calling it b-e-a-utiful !! (bruce almighty way... and for the reps ( which helped me to get me the second green dot) :)
  18. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    its missing that mystereous look
  19. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    @amit... yah ... sorry :(.... its rather too obvious wat its all about :)
  20. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    finally someone knows its that...
    n for the green dot,can u tell me how many points do i increase :p: ...(u can pm me that)...just curious ;)

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