This is an incident which actually happned to me ... that girl was sweet...most girls r sweet... hahaha.... forget it here it goes Title:- Dark Dec night .... do doooo duru hoho la-la-la humm humm it was dark december night foggy and too cold was thinking-and-woundring walking down the road !! Suddenly i noticed this situation that i host we were just three elements this girl, me and these tall lamp post !! As we pass down these lamp posts, this funny thing use to happen Our shadows use to come closer, as the dark strech appeared to lenthen !! this beauty was cautioustly, checking my shadow from behind as we past along the light zones, this idea crossed my mind !! "why not to touch her shadow with my shadow" and say what i increased my speed to catch up to her, as i thought !! so here i go, thouch her shoulder with my hand just a shadow touchs a shadow, as u can undrestand "HOW DARE YOU"-she truns back, flys a circle her hair band i was a whole 2 yards back, and she stunned where she stand !! gave a smile and went on wistling, i had triggered imagination i knew she needed some time to digest the situation !! ....
I dont wanna hear how the forum leader discourages every1 so i will not say anythng but i can say, cant i, that madhuresh u need to work on ur grammar, spelling and a lot of other things, BIG TIME. bah.. what the heck... i'm entitled to having an opinion arent i? here's what i think: it's bad madhuresh, REALLY bad... (well, that's just what i felt, dont feel offended ) It's not a very good story and the execution is even worse. It was remotely funny, but not in the way u intended it to be. "Phir Sahi" was the only poem of urs on IGT which i felt was worth reading.
oh no .. lord have mercy .. not again .. but i was too harsh last time .. i would be a bit nicer this time .. cuz now we have a FL .. and i cannot dare say anything bad in her presence ... forgive me trish .. but i cant help it .. so here we goo .. *do doooo duru hoho la-la-la humm humm allright!! another cheesy starting .. oh well .. thats just you i guess .. i'll just skip to the good parts *it was dark december night foggy and too cold was thinking-and-woundring walking down the road !! nothin wrong with this .. sometimes lonely men need some time out .. they need to "wound" down the road and take a leak at the local park .. and given it was too cold .. i bet you would have been leaving skid marks all the way ... (those who know what i am talking .. will know what i am talking about) *Suddenly i noticed this situation that i host we were just three elements this girl, me and these tall lamp post !! well .. you know what mate .. 21 years .. in this ruddy old world .. and i know one thing .. you just dont "suddenly" notice a girl walking down the lone road .. on a cold evening .. nope .. you see her from a mile away .. forget that you were off to buy medicine for your dog and end up 3 miles away from your yard with no taxi fare .. so .. yeah .. you can figure the rest for yourself .. tall lamps ... err .. "tall" .. "long" .. "slender" .. yeah i understand .. not your fault .. (those who know what i am talking .. will know what i am talking about) *As we pass down these lamp posts, this funny thing use to happen Our shadows use to come closer, as the dark strech appeared to lenthen !! now thats a good thing you have said there ... our shadows use to come closer, as the dark stretch appear to lengthen ... this is good .. as the shadows grow longer .. they get closer to each other .. very right .. but this is not a "funny thing" .. i would call it a natural phenomenon .. *this beauty was cautioustly, checking my shadow from behind as we past along the light zones, this idea crossed my mind !! how do you know she is beautiful?? .. u havent seen her face to face have you? .. she could be a vampire .. or a ugly swamp monster wearing a fake facade luring you into the dark streets just so that "it" can have an early christmas dinner! never trust these ruddy lass ya know .. if they can check yer shadows from behind there is a good chance they have got eyes on their bottom .. *"why not to touch her shadow with my shadow" and say what i increased my speed to catch up to her, as i thought !! touch her shadow with yours? .. what good would that be? .. oh well .. i guess you are being artistic .. yawn .. very well .. go on ... touch it .. she wont feel anything anyway .. so we move on .. you increased your speed and tried to catch up with her .. in real life i would have expected to hear a scream .. a siren .. then a cop yellin "i am taking you in son, stalking on this part of town .. you must be outta yer mind"... *so here i go, thouch her shoulder with my hand just a shadow touchs a shadow, as u can undrestand "HOW DARE YOU"-she truns back, flys a circle her hair band i was a whole 2 yards back, and she stunned where she stand !! right .. now "bare" (just carrying forward the theme of bad grammar and perverse spelling mistakes) with me .. i am going to talk some physics here .. as you say that you touched her shadow .. this can only mean .. that the light source was behind you .. so .. it was light source .. then you .. then 2 yards later .. the poor swamp monster ... now .. physics say . .the further away from the light source you are.. the longer will be your shadow .. so that means .. the swamp monster would have had longer shadow than yours .. and "it" being already leading you by 2 yards .. i find it hard to imagine how on earth you would have managed to touch her long stretching shadow from this postion .. well if it was .. only the shadow touching the shadow .. it would have been understandable .. your head would have reached atleast "its" knees .. but your hand and "its" shoulder .. naa .. i cant imagine that .. unless you were jumpin up and down .. hand above your head .. trying to do something which would have made no difference at you ending up being a christmas turkey ..!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! then the swamp monster turns and ...bam! .. its not a monster .. i was wrong .. it is a girl .. phew .. i shouldnt raise my expectaiton to high .. now i am really down .. i was hoping for some gore .. anyway i am bored now .. so lets end this now .... she screams .. you run .. the neighbours take your photograph ..its in the papers next morning .. they ban you from taking a leak at the local park .. you call a plumber to fix your toilet .. all well and good .. *gave a smile and went on wistling, i had triggered imagination i knew she needed some time to digest the situation !! aha!! digest the situation!! why dont yo admit she was a swamp monster after all!! and its not the situation she needed to digest it was YOU!! cooool!! so tell me how long was her gut? and did she puck you out at the swamp or the local dinners ladies room? i hope i wasnt too harsh .. just for fun sake .. nothing personal ..
i wud call it a nice try... i don't know all abt execution and all but i liked the idea... keep trying u can write better...
srk dude...rock on ..ur replies r more nice thn those poems....hehe..and i wonder y he uses the dodododo...lalal....and turur..in his poems......i guess he s a musical poet..hehe.....
