Crimes of passion!

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nimisha, May 30, 2007.

  1. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    Crimes of passion!!

    Crimes of passion.. how could i restrain??
    gosh!! this victim is so hot.. driving me wild insane..

    Turning lights dim..
    ooohhh look at him!!
    how delicious every bit of that body seem..

    Intense eyes, chiselled jaw..
    I wonder.. tonight, how much he's gonna get raw?
    Tickling my senses.. his aroma..
    may be his cologne, that is making my desire swell..
    Or is it really this much sxey his sweaty skin smell..

    hmmm tight, toned, muscles shaped.. and perfectly alligned..
    ahhhh that bare chest, could he be more masculine????
    all those hair..
    here and there..
    typical male stuff..
    see.. he hasnt shaved today!!
    so.. yeahhh.. its gonna get rough!!

    the curve of his lips.. intersting.. isnt it?
    so is that sensuous chin.. but long a bit..
    And this vein at his neck.. pulsating so strong..
    oh boyy.. sure..this guy is turning me soooo onn!!

    Excuse me!!!!!!! is im staring at his Bums..
    What u gonna do?? punish me for this lust??
    ohh crap! ryt now im busy, imagining some other kinda thrust!!!

    look here he comes to me.. wow so much power in his grip..
    his firm hold on me.. whoaa.. i've got him tricked!!
    May be i'll kill him hard.. or i'll just take it slow..
    gawddd! why i am telling u this, its enough for u to know!!

    not gonna feign..
    and wont explain..
    this offence is worth.. all dolors, euros or yen..
    crimes of passion.. how could i restrain?? could i??




    sorryyyy to be this much of naughty on d forum..
    sorryyyy for spelling mistakes...
    sorryyyy for the gramar goof ups..
    what i can hope is.. u like this thing i wrote..
     
  2. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    The Axe effect?

    EDIT: DId you actually use the word "bums" for a guy's ass?

    HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAA


    and ummm.. if you know there are spelling mistakes, why don't you correct them?
     
  3. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

  4. paranoid13rohan

    paranoid13rohan .: iNDiaN iDioT 3.0 :.

    feelin hot hot hot ... nice to see a girl write something like this ... usually it's the other way round ... i like it :rock:
     
  5. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Naughty..yes..
    Must say it was pretty gripping to read but I kinda didn't like it.Seems more like a girl's wet fantasy/dream.I mean I know its a poem but it doesn't give the sense that it's true..not convincing,that is.
    And after reading it all I was left with..."Okaaay....so???"Basically its a horny girl about to get naughty,what do I care...I'm not that guy...

    "gawddd! why i am telling u this, its enough for u to know!!"

    You said it!!!

    I'm really sorry if this post has turned out to be rude but that's what I honestly thought.
     
  6. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    good to see some favourable replies.. as i was kinda apprehensive...
    thanks guys!!

    @cryptu.. bums..!! couldnt think of any other word that time.. didnt mind to correct it or try different words, as it came just smooth.. might wanna think another now..

    @not_neo.. hey u not rude! i infer u just like ur girl simple n sober.. thats good!! thanks for d honest reply..
     
  7. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Way off topic:
    Hehe..no I don't mind bad girls either:dance: (wrong smiley I know)

    On topic:Thank you for taking it so well and in the right sense..looking forward to read more from you:)
     
  8. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    no wonder!:p:
     
  9. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    @nimisha.. just coz he didnt like ur poem doesnt mean that he doesnt like naughty girls. He just didnt like the way you wrote it.

    A guy doesnt have to love your poem JUST coz you wrote about something like this. It has to be written well too (IMO, it was badly written)
     
  10. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    Now I've seen everything.
     
  11. Super-Admin

    Super-Admin Administrator Staff Member

    i dotn think little kids should see this poetry! lol good work nimisha.
     
  12. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    ahaa.. mix replies!!
    thanks for d appreciation who like it and for others, i'll try to improve next time(if there is any)

    @admin.. yeah they certainly shudnt!
     
  13. ~Bish

    ~Bish The Illusionist

    hmmm nice attempt nimmo.. feel like getting naughty wid u.. ;)

    nicely done..
     
  14. ok not well written but atlest some one wrote on this sub !
    cheers ;)
     
  15. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    @ monica..
    believe me.. even i thought so after writing it..
     
  16. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    sahi hai
    mast hai...
    tera mobile number kyaa hai ?
     
  17. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    ummmmmm.... soooooooooo.... lol... never got to read a GIRLS thoughts about such descriptions and maself never thought of riting it down but must say gurl u did a PRETTY good job! ;) but then again... nopes its not ma kinda poem... i just dont prefer reading about such stuff... makes it sound ak weird and made up! i dont know why but the poem wasnt something i would enjoy reading...but hi dese r ma thoughts about the poem... hehe
     

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