Chipe huye jazbaat

A beautiful one... i ve tried to make one with no negativity...something which i m mostly accused of !!
Here you go

kabhi socha na tha ki hum, ek aise mod par milenge
jis din ki dil ko chah na thi, woh bhi dekh lenge

Tum aaye meri zindagi mein, Jab dil ke tukde samait rahi thi
Humari badti nazdeekiyon ko, Sehmi si mehsoos kar rahi thi

Mere ghamo ko apna kar, Apni khushiya mujhse tumne baati
Taaron ki chaon mein baatein kar, Kitni hi raatein humne kaati

Dosti ke shehar mein, Naye sapne humne sajaye
Tumhari ibadat ki mene, Par tumhe kyon jatayen

Dil ne jab di dastak, Humne ansuna kar diya
Pyar ke afsaane ko, Chaukhat se hi vida kar diya

Kuch ankahe ehsaas, Is dil mein dabaaye
Ji rahe hai aaj bhi hum, Apne jazbaat chipaye

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So how was it ? :

Comments plz

 

Awwww its lovely!

 

Thank you deewani

 

aah its ''B U T ful''.(don't read it as buttfull):RollLol:

 

Thanks for butting in :RollLol:

Thank you

 

u were quite rite....but in the last two lines it seems that u r trying to show ur feelings but cant...which to me somehow seems 0.01% -ve :.....otherwise its just bootiphul...:RollLol: i thot of trying a different version of...ahem ...'beautiful' :

 

Thank you garima...
ab yaar meri poem ... poem nahi rahegi na meri trademark negativity ke bina :
As long as its not bootiFOOL... i m ok with it

 

man..damn phool......its really beutifullllllllll......

chupana bhi nahi aata,jatana bhi nahi aata,...........i think its frm baazigar...

and remove tht sad face smiley frm the post....

 

thank you....you know there was a play that i saw starring seema biswaas. "Khabsoorat(yes not khubsoorat) Bahu" and it had one dialogue " I m wonder wonderfool you are bloody bloodyfool"
:RollLol:

when did i use any sad smiley :

 

well everyone has thier own version of the word...but i love mine...
its B-e-a-utiful varshita...loved reading it...

 

yah.. the bruce almighty way !!
Thank you

 

toooo good...be on this sunny side of life..vo lines yaad aayi shalendre ki...

kabhi palkoon pe asoon hain, kabhi lab pe shikayaat hai
magar aye zindagi phir bhi, mujhe tujh se mohabbat hai

 

ya.. I m loving it
Thank you.
It reminds me of a beautiful song from the movie sadma
aye zindagi gale laga le
humne bhi tere har ek gham ko
gale se lagaya hai ... haina?

 

good one!
i read it as "chipke hue jazbaat"

 

speak up your "jazbaat"...i wont mind...:

 

@ ansh.... thank you... shukar hai aapko kuch to pasand aaya... Chashme ka number check karva lo :

@amit...excuse me??...come again !!

 

Very touching .. its a li'l positive.. a li'l negative .. has many flavours .. but i'l add one flavour which is missin BOOTYful (improvisin on Garima .. dat makes it ***y too :grin:

 

thanks for your views...
Hope you enjoyed the mixed curry !!

 

hmmm

hehehehehe........not here....nahiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii:

 

kya bakwaas hai..... abhi tum pitoge !!