Chalo aaj kuch kar jaa yein Zindagi ke saath ek baar phir khel jaa yein Niraasha ne jo hosh gavaya hein sharaab ke ek pyaale se vaapas le aa yein Na kar paaye bapha thik se hosh mein Nashe mein kam se kam bebaphayi to thik se kar jaa yein Chalo aaj kuch kar jaa yein Zindagi ke saath ek baar phir khel jaa yein Dhoondh na paaye manzil ujaale mein Ab saath aandhere ka bhi kuch aaz maa yein Mara hai mil ke khawayishon ne hum ko Tamannayo ko saari ab hum maar ja yein Chalo aaj kuch kar jaa yein Zindagi ke saath ek baar phir khel jaa yein Janta please comment and appreciate my efforts and encourage me writting more stuff :
good effort...i think it shud b bewafai instead of 'bebaphayi'...i got a lil confused ther...otherws thers a nice flow in the poem :beer:
thanks garima.... bewafai Vs 'bebaphayi' - I have explaination for that: do line pahle ek pyaala sharaab ka piyaa hai, kuch to aasar dikhna chahiye yaar : wat do u say?
good effort yaaar..... Mara hai mil ke khawayishon ne hum ko Tamannayo ko saari ab hum maar ja yein every one this is best usage of aspiration khawayish:- (future) ho gi tamanna:- (present ) hai hasrat:-(past) thi
