A dying candle...

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by sukriti_hats, May 16, 2010.

  1. sukriti_hats

    sukriti_hats Member

    This poem is far too deep...and there's something else behind it...but u wont get it so u better not waste ur time in finding the reason out....just read the poem n comment :)

    Far beyond any mere eye
    Was a single candle about to die
    Something was unsaid; I felt it in the air
    But all I did was - stare

    Burning in shades of yellow and blue
    Trying to tell me what’s wrong and what’s true
    Darker and darker the night grew
    So I went closer for the serenest view

    I sat there admiring its exquisiteness
    But it seemed to fade in darkness
    My contemplations was disturbed by a tear
    And I found myself wrapped in sheets of fear

    “Wait, oh wait”, I screamed in horror
    The room was imbued by strange air of terror
    One pearly tear rolled down my cheek
    And I felt incapacitated and weak

    I tried to run but my fear choked me down
    I tried to run but in worry I was drowned
    So I shut my eyes and killed it at the right time
    It was a murder but certainly not a crime

    Oh poor candle, I did this for your sake
    Oh poor candle, I had not committed a mistake
    Oh poor candle, your presence will always keep me strong
    But you can’t say that all I did was wrong!!!
     
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  2. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    It may have some meaning for you, but what makes this poem so beautiful is that everyone in this forum can associate the lines with something or the other that has happened/happening in their lives.

    You have grown of quite some stature Sukriti, well done!!!
     
  3. Now this is what i call poem... * i knw i knw iknw ..lol*
    what i get is it talks about the two sides of ur own .. one which u left and shatterd due to the fear of the things around and one which u are to save a dearest part (reffered as candle: mataphor) .... am i right ??

    care to prove me worng..haha
     
  4. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    wow!!! its truly beautiful.....i loved it!!!! u rock!!! :)
     
  5. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Your best lines ever.....

    this piece just left me speechless..
    just awesome! just just awesome!
    reps,....
    \m/

    bdw its more than a sacrifice, i guess?.............???
     
  6. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    lol....cant rep!
     
  7. allstarsband

    allstarsband New Member

    Its awssum
    I liked the 2nd last para...too gr8
     
  8. sukriti_hats

    sukriti_hats Member

    @walk_alone: thank u vry much...well i wrote this poem last moth but i posted it here yesterday coz i ws afraid...whether ne1 wud lyk it or not....but i've got an awesome response
    @monica: well u r right till some extent...but i told u naa don't waste ur time in tryin to find the reason behind writing this poem!!
    @nandy: thnx gal...btw hw old r u??
    @horsesmouth: getting such kinda appreciation frm u is an honor for me
    thank u for everything :)
    @allstarsband: thnk u ^_^
     
  9. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    well written .. nice stuff !!! this forum is picking up with so many talented people around..
     
  10. prathamjain

    prathamjain New Member

    awesum poem yaaar ./..luvvved it
     
  11. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    hey sukriti i am 16 nw....
     
  12. sukriti_hats

    sukriti_hats Member

    @ricky: thnkkkkkkk youuuu :):):)

    @pratham: thnx to u too ^_^

    @nandy: wow i've found my twin who may/may not luk lyk me but....is of d same age :):):)
     
  13. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    hi5!!! me too... :)
     
  14. this ws good effort ..keep posting
     

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