Zindagi

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by madhuresh, Dec 28, 2005.

  1. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    This is how shers r written........

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    Zindagi jo kar ke kinara gujar gayii
    Phir fikrr kyaa kare kaha aur kidhar gayii !!

    Vo vaqut se ladta huaa be-maut margaya
    lahoon kis us ki raakh se kismat savar gayii !!

    gujroo-basar ko maang ke layee the jo diyaa
    kaajal se uske raat ankoo-basar gayii !!

    vo deer tak bhi kuch-nahi kehte the jab mile
    yahkhlakth kisi aur ki kismat savar gayii !!

    Zindagi jo kar ke kinara gujar gayii
    Phir fikrr kyaa kare kaha aur kidhar gayii !!

    Madhuresh


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    kabhi kabhi accha lagta hai aisee cheejee likhne main...
     
  2. syedtabraiz

    syedtabraiz New Member

    AAte saath maarne marne ki baaten?????
     
  3. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    hardly any1 who i have come across here posting their poems r so confident abt themselves :shock:

    it's good! but what is gujroo-basar and ankoo-basar???? (am i an idiot for not knowing what that means or is my not knowing that justified :think: )

    plz write such thngs only... i hate the other stuff u write
     
  4. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    chacha Galib wrote....
    "khaboo-basar ko ik hi lamha kareeb tha"
    so maine try kiya and yes urdu langauge gives u this liberty... even if u ever come across mir-taki-mir...... he was a master of this kind of usage...........this format used by me is the standard foramat for gazals.....that matla maquata..this one has radif.....

    so i call all these rules..though me unruly
    "Ranjish hi sahi dil hi dukaane ke liye aa !!
    aa phir se mujhe chod ke jaane ke liye aa !!"
    -Ahmed Faraz
    dont u thnk he sounds arogant :)
     
  5. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    i still dunno what it means :eek:: (m not good with urdu).. care to explain?
     
  6. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    hey man, write poems like these instead of writin those crappy ***** poems.....this is a good poem........
     
  7. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    gujroo-basar ko maang ke layee the jo diyaa
    kaajal se uske raat ankoo-basar gayii !!

    The poet says ..
    for simply lighting his home he borrowed a lamp
    but form its "KAJAL" (the black thingy deposited by diyaas or lamps which is mainly carbon which is put in eyes ; line u girls use eye liners) the night stayed in his eyes forever...
    u know the shers of gazals have this quality that they can have shades of meanings for diffferent people in diff.. situations.......though its time consuming to make it all happen ..and that is may be beacause u have to select words from diffent climatic conditions...i talk a lot right
    n abhi ..this stuff is very time consuming vo ***** hi accha hai
     
  8. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    its better u take time writing these than writing those crappers.....
     
  9. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    why write "vo *****" just for the heck of it??

    it's like, a million times better to spend time and come up with smthng that's NOT crappy
     
  10. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    ^^ crappy ...ahem..thths my word.....hehe......
     
  11. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    bhai apni apni thinking....
    This is how i say this

    Inhi bigde dimaagoon main
    ghaane khaboo ke lacche hain
    Hume aise hi rehne do
    Ki hum aise hi acche hain.....
     
  12. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    hmm.......wonderin if i was talkin to a wall...okies dude carry on......
     

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