Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nandy0894, May 17, 2010.

  1. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    they cover me up with filth and order me to lick over it
    i feel like screaming out loud that i am too sick of it....
    they chain me and whip me like a wild beast
    i guess upon my disgusted tears do they feast...
    they fob me with my failures
    stab me with rude facts and figures...
    they make me walk on red hot coals
    make me climb cool ice poles
    i feel like calling them all ass*****...
    they hold me up wth my neck...threaten me to say something..they demand some reason
    but all they receive is silence uneven...
    afte the whole day is over and they know that they are a mneace
    they call out to each other "i guess she wont spit a thing...we're through"
    and finally i shout back with deep indignation..." the damn bloody reason for all this is that bloody bastard in you...."...

    u r probably gonna hate it for it is rude... very rude!!!
  2. sukriti_hats

    sukriti_hats Member

    wen i ws reading this one i felt ws for ur parents....this is coz sometimes parents force us to do something v hate d most n yet we LOVE them the most!!
    but i cud be wrong too....btw it's nice
  3. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    its not rude, its pleasently different. I like the style.

    Poetry like other atrts should not be confined to verses and paras.
  4. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    ^yes yes,,,,especially this 1....

    good going....different......

    @sukriti........ofcourse it aint for parents....the last line confirms
  5. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    oh ur god!!! it was not 4 my parents gal!!!! i wont dare to call dem "bastards" even if dey kill me...!!!
  6. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnk u sooo much dear....nd ya u r absolutely rite its not for my parents!!! d last line confirms it!!
  7. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnk u soooo much dear...i was pretty afraid dat tis' is gonna b discarded by ol of u...
  8. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    no work of art shud be discarded.. very different.. very nice !!!
  9. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    o c'mon.....discard, y? we all like poems.... mostly which r unspoken thoughts.... always good......
  10. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnk u soo much dear.... :) u made my day... :)
  11. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnk u soo muc..i just felt it was rude so...

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