-You- Dont you choke on your laugh Dont you let out a smile to vie People call you sweet I know you wont believe They feel your life knows no want Desires weigh you down Want of a want makes you frown Faking a static tideless life A tempest brews within Your name says you love everyone Claiming double-edge it makes you warring But motives know no bearing Trampling on unforgettable yesterday Tread on a morrow today Dont get whey Having knocked twice Death is waiting out that door Waiting to make it thrice It knows you For its listening to your heartbeat More than you Kick out the blue And make yourself a merrier you Believe what you say Make believe what you feign Riding on seasonal rainbows each day See the horizon today.. ---`-,--;--<@ Dedicated to someone close to me do gimme your comments whether you like it..hate it.. or feel it should be better lemme know! Thanks for reading..
no..it shouldnt be better!!..A Sublime piece of work....thanx for giving a bright turn to ur poem's orientation..(although it still manages to make one end up wid mixed feelings) I yearn for reading light and joyous poems..but i think no1 would write poems if there were no sorrows....getting back to where i began..I simply liked it....
Great piece of work.........keep it up Its more like a free verse...............it really feels like you are having a coversation with some one realy close..........btw...whats ur name. PS:Those close to you bring out the best in you.
Bubz .. I really like to read yo poems .. U put yo truest feelings on paper wid great words n style .. Rock on gal !! This would have definitely brought a smile on yo face.... I bet !!! *Thinks who'z dat close person* :think:
acchi hai...specially "It knows you For its listening to your heartbeat More than you Kick out the blue " Main sacchi sacchi kehta hoon, samjho kori bakvaas nahi kuch loog issliye jeten hain, ki marne main kuch khaas nahi..
the feeling were quite mixed and as usual i'm not satisfied how my poems turn out.. so added the "whether you like it..hate it.. or feel it should be better" clause.. thanks for your comments girl!.. and yh i tried to be a little pleasant with this one...but jus tried..so it still shows thats a wonderful thing to say..thanks! my name is Martina...and its not my pseudonym as some people think : and yh...it is pretty much a free verse.. ramblings made fancy you can say Thanks for your comments! it sure did get a smile on my face... poems unknowingly reflect the person's feelings Thanks for your comments stop thinking about the "someone close to me":..! Thanks Manu
why dont u get satisfied wit ur poems..when they r so good.. may be u shudnt get so.. it will keep u inspired for making more of this good stuff..
Thanks Hira,..means a lot when you reply girl and Nimisha...well ... thats a something i dont think i'l ever get over. thanks for your comments..
This was as good as i could want it to be :grin: You truly are my sister! The ideas connected, but in keeping with my promise of honesty i do have to say, SOMETHING i felt lacking, dont ask me what, cause i can never tell...but overall darling, it was wonderful
i thought atleast you'd know the dedication anywy Thanks for your comments dear.. like someone said today..and like my title says..that smile is jus a disguise
Thanks a lot Hardik and your gonna save This:shock: i'm hearing that for the first time! i'm really surprised.. thanks again!..
^^why is that surprising?...i always keep poems i like in a folder on my desktop....its a good feeling too read a few nice words once in a while...
surprising cause i'm hearing it for the first time.. well... honestly ! the only people who have my poems are the ones for whom i've dedicated and written poems.."Tum" and "Dil se Dil ki Dosti" ie...only 2 people.. both are my best friends the others poems are jus...i donno what to put them under..: this sure was surprising..coz its a different case with this one but anwy.. Thanks again..feels nice..
