he he...yet another 'mushy' poem from me... In your eyes I can see the world In your arms I can fly like a bird You are bad, you are true You are the man I wanna woo And you dont even have a clue About what I feel for You Your silence Speak thousand words Your touch Convey feelings...unheard With you I love to argue With you I always want to talk to But whenever we do I just fail to tell you That I have started falling for You waiting for feedback.....:
@taxyse...u dont need to say 'gr8 work' if its not gr8...: thanx for reading & sharing that u like isse pehle wali...but which one??? will try to write better nxt time:
lol @installment....have u evr heard conflicting statements....song 'suraj hua madham' has few of them...i reely liked the way it ws written...ws trying some thng on the similar patter....othrws in an eye how wud u see the World....bolo bolo??
okieee gotcha....yeah..that poem still brings a smile on my face...he he... well...this one i wrote yesterday...when i ws half asleep...this mite b the reason....well agli baar poore hosh me i'll try to write....lol anyways, taxyse thanx for reading n for ur genuine feedbk...
Hmmm!! I see! .....Cows flying, Moon burning ..... fish climbing in the tree stuffs ........... wonder how a flying cow will look like ... :RollLol: -------------------- edited to correct a typo....
knight...lol@ bollywood song....well, its the situation m goin thru these days....thanx yaaar. btw, whoz the guy in ur avtar....just wondering :think:
never knew my picture was so thoughtful... .. nvm, keep working hard on ur writting u can improve !!!
nah...was just curious bout it...but if it mks u happy...then i wud say,,,yes...it is & yeah,,,,thanx for the advice...will try to concentrate on writing
Even I like ......look at my title ........... last post was a particular reference to my prev post where I did a silly typo (which changed the whole meaning) ... ....... In general yeah ... sometimes I also like to do some silly stuff... y'know whats the point in being very particular and correct always ?? Sometimes its fun the other way .....
ohkay....now i remember wat u typed pehle... & yeah...there is no point being perfect...u shud commit some mistakes so that u can learn something in life ....lol...thats y i keep on doin mistks <he he...thats a joke, neva tk me seriously>
umm .. its not too bad garry .. but not one of your best .. i feel you were struggling to rhyme here: You are bad, you are true You are the man I wanna woo And you dont even have a clue About what I feel for You maye you should have gone with the flow and shouldnt have worried about rhyming .. anyway .. its not too bad .. i like the ending
thanx Shak...yeah..i ws a bit conscious bout the ryhme in this one... c u found it finally.... <i kno wat that wink is for >
while creating thoughts in words on paper........we go with the flow........ its natural........if we stop..then the stop- gap goes sometimes awkward too.............. but its good........you carry on............. rohit astroguru26