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Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Garima, Dec 19, 2005.

  1. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    he he...yet another 'mushy' poem from me...


    In your eyes
    I can see the world
    In your arms
    I can fly like a bird

    You are bad, you are true
    You are the man I wanna woo
    And you dont even have a clue
    About what I feel for You

    Your silence
    Speak thousand words
    Your touch
    Convey feelings...unheard

    With you I love to argue
    With you I always want to talk to
    But whenever we do
    I just fail to tell you
    That I have started falling for You


    waiting for feedback.....:eek::
     
  2. taxyse

    taxyse t3h.

    welll i didnt like it.....
     
  3. taxyse

    taxyse t3h.

    i mean i liked issae pehle waali...(the only poem i ever liked ....dunno why)..and was expectin somethin similar.....but ....
    neway...i should say...great work...keep it up blah blah blah
     
  4. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$

    Birds fly in arms?? :confused:

    I liked it though....... luckily you didnt write it in installment.. :p:
     
  5. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    @taxyse...u dont need to say 'gr8 work' if its not gr8...:eek::

    thanx for reading & sharing that u like isse pehle wali...but which one??? will try to write better nxt time:eek::
     
  6. taxyse

    taxyse t3h.

    arre dont mind me.....i hate poetry (unless it sounds proffesional)..... i have been gettin really put off by all the poetry stuff floatin around.....but no offnese to ne one....
    i liked that one..the first mushy poem by you....which had some 'serious romanticism'.....i dont rem nething from that though...lolz..but yeah i liked it
     
  7. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    lol @installment....have u evr heard conflicting statements....song 'suraj hua madham' has few of them...i reely liked the way it ws written...ws trying some thng on the similar patter....othrws in an eye how wud u see the World....bolo bolo??
     
  8. knight_guitar

    knight_guitar Lead Guitarist

    Argh !!! sounds like a bollywood song dubbed in english, anyways nice try girl !!
     
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  9. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    okieee gotcha....yeah..that poem still brings a smile on my face...he he...
    well...this one i wrote yesterday...when i ws half asleep...this mite b the reason....well agli baar poore hosh me i'll try to write....lol

    anyways, taxyse thanx for reading n for ur genuine feedbk...
     
  10. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$


    Hmmm!! I see! .....Cows flying, Moon burning ..... fish climbing in the tree stuffs ...........

    wonder how a flying cow will look like ... :RollLol:


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    edited to correct a typo....
     
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  11. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    knight...lol@ bollywood song....well, its the situation m goin thru these days....thanx yaaar.

    btw, whoz the guy in ur avtar....just wondering :think:
     
  12. knight_guitar

    knight_guitar Lead Guitarist

    That's me in my avtaar :mad: :mad: :mad: :mad:
     
  13. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    @apurba....he he...yeah....i kno its silly..but sometimes u feel like doin silly thngs...dont u??
     
  14. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    hmmmmmm :think: :think: :think:......ok
     
  15. knight_guitar

    knight_guitar Lead Guitarist

    never knew my picture was so thoughtful... :p.. nvm, keep working hard on ur writting u can improve !!!
     
  16. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$

    :) may be.... :eek:: but I corrected the silly stuff on time I guess ;)
     
  17. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    nah...was just curious bout it...but if it mks u happy...then i wud say,,,yes...it is ;)
    & yeah,,,,thanx for the advice...will try to concentrate on writing :)
     
  18. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    lol....gud for u bud...all the best...
    my case is hopeless...cos i like doin crazy thng....lol.
     
  19. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$

    Even I like ......look at my title ;) ........... last post was a particular reference to my prev post where I did a silly typo (which changed the whole meaning) ...

    ....... In general yeah ... sometimes I also like to do some silly stuff... y'know whats the point in being very particular and correct always ?? Sometimes its fun the other way .....
     
  20. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ohkay....now i remember wat u typed pehle...

    & yeah...there is no point being perfect...u shud commit some mistakes so that u can learn something in life ....lol...thats y i keep on doin mistks <he he...thats a joke, neva tk me seriously;)>
     

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