Wings and Man

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by horsesmouth, Dec 30, 2009.

  1. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Travelling in the sun,
    A silhouette in the sky.
    Shadows cast upon the earth,
    A bird tries to fly.

    Swatting in the swiftly wind,
    their wings sail in pride.
    Higher than our imaginations,
    their tiny bodies hide.
    In trees and clouds and concealed nests;
    Work for the day, nights of rest.
    Together in harmony, sing for the day;
    No sign of boundaries, peace to stay.

    I wonder if we had wings,
    We be allowed to fly away?
    From derisions and seclusions,
    and over twisted paths ahead.

    But all our thoughts dwell in selfishness,
    Ghosts of wars and wicked greed.
    Never use a finger to wipe their tears,
    Nor give a hand for a hand in need.

    Try as we might, fly on machines;
    Upon the earth, we stay and die.
    Never get past our netherly thoughts,
    Maybe the reason we never fly.
  2. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    again a gud thoguht ...i feel its inspired from Avtar

    gud effort
  3. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    avtar as in???n thnks again, its alwys you few who reply.......
  4. shashankgothic

    shashankgothic New Member

    hey dude i liked it.. keep up the gud work
  5. Nishiva

    Nishiva New Member

    That's great. I agree with the post above!
    The poem overal is great, I just can't help but love the 4th stanza the most~
  6. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    hey thanks all......
  7. suhasputtu

    suhasputtu New Member

    hey awesome poem man ....
  8. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    thanks a lot.....
  9. suprita

    suprita New Member

    nyc one.....
  10. allstarsband

    allstarsband New Member

    hey its really great thing
    i liked the other meaning it has

    truly awesome.. keep up the work, i've always been a fan of ur poetry here!
  11. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    very well written horsemouth,

    I liked the comparison that paints the "freedom" so magnificantly. I also liked the fact that it portraits "human weaknesses" beautifully.

    good work indeed
  12. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    hey !Thanks all!
    actully while writing, the theme actully was the sense-of-freedom, but gradually it changed.....
  13. allstarsband

    allstarsband New Member

    I think it changed suddenly, not gradually.
    But its one of the most awesome poetry i've seen

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