Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by CrYpTiC_angel, Nov 1, 2005.

  1. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    Well, this poem's very similar to my other poems, but here it is anyway...


    I wasn't supposed
    To die so young
    No tears in my eyes
    No emotions, I'm so numb

    No faith, no god
    No desire
    I may pretend
    But I'm not a liar

    I try to be strong
    I try to refrain
    From cutting myself
    From inflicting such pain

    I don't need to share
    I don't need a shrink
    But I myself don't know now
    What exactly to think

    Why such agony
    When I miss him no more
    I can't see any wounds
    But everything feels so sore

    Something's killing me
    But I really don't know what
    Will this be forever
    WIll I, forever rot?

    Somehow I can't cry
    And I can't even scream
    While happiness seems like
    A distant dream.
    Hardik likes this.
  2. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    that was really good!!(needless to say)
    well done!!
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    if i think of reading this poem any other time
    the thoughts would still be the same

    your good in pouring your heart into your words
    you always watch the brim and dont let them overflow...
    Nice work babe..

    Tk care... **Hugs**
  4. shsnawada

    shsnawada Cyborgs & Pasta

    How could you maintain such consistency???
  5. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    @ansh, martina

    thnx :)


    it's not so hard to be consistent unless u r really good or smthng...
  6. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    It was far too angsty for my liking...If I'm reading something like this, I prefer that the questions being asked be a little deeper.

    But, nonetheless, it was well written.
  7. J.J

    J.J The Guitar God

    wow...xcellent...really gr8
  8. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!


    well, maybe i'm jst not deep, u know... i wrote whatever was in my mind at the time..
    anyways, thanks


  9. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    Everyone is deep....what most of us find difficult to do is explore ourselves at depth since, like in the oceans, the pressure tends to suffocate us :cool:

    psh, ignore me when I'm in these moods.
  10. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    the best from you i must say!

    why why why why why why why why why why why why why why why cant i write such poems now a days?!why why why why whywhy why why why whywhy why why why why??????
  11. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    ^^^lol... thnx!

    maybe u should jst try try try try try try try try try try try try try try writing such poems!! just try try try try try try try try!! :RollLol:
  12. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    yeah try try try! as bjr stated maybe i cant tap into my own depths and bring out a change in my poems! :eek::
  13. #iR@


    GREATTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTt!!!!!!!!!!!!!! u rite REALLY well! THAT"S WAT I CAN SAY! ROCK ON !!!!!!!!!! :rock: :rock: :rock:
  14. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!


    yeah, try that..

    thnx! :beer:
  15. shsnawada

    shsnawada Cyborgs & Pasta

    Do you actually read a lot of poems???? Does that affect anything?
  16. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    actually, i dont.... i never seem to get enough reading done :(
  17. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    :nw: :nw: :nw: :nw: ......WOW.....EXCELLENT......B-E-A-UTIFUL.....i wish i could rite like u.......these were the exact emotions i had when i broke up with my gf ....(5 year relationship)... :eek:: ...in words!!!

    wish i could give all my reps to you.....angel :rock:

    EDIT: sorry if you meant something else from those lines....i saw it my way....
  18. shsnawada

    shsnawada Cyborgs & Pasta

    Hahaha. good .thats hope for me then. :grin:
  19. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    thnx a lot...

    and if u liked it the way u saw it, that's all that matters coz d poem has solved it's purpose for me already...
  20. the_wizard

    the_wizard Omega == God

    nice one....

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