Why - My 1st song

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by geniusoid, Oct 27, 2006.

  1. geniusoid

    geniusoid Acoustic Alchemist

    This was the 1st song I wrote:

    WHY
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    The quicksands of time
    escape beneath my feet
    as I watch the birds soar in the sky
    the thin lines of horizon
    which seem to meet
    but never do so, and no one knows just WHY

    and WHY does the sunrise in the east
    and set in the west
    and where the birds go in the night
    and WHY does it pain
    when the one u love, is the one who leaves u
    and WHY do u feel as if nothing ain`t right

    If life is a roller-coaster ride then WHY am I going down
    If life is a mixed bag then WHY do I feel its just a frown
    if life is bliss then WHY do I feel its just a bane
    If life is a kiss then WHY do I feel all the pain...

    "Time goes on and on,
    It never waits", so they say,
    "after every night there is a beautiful day".
    "Love all", so the preachers say,
    "say no to greed
    say your prayers everyday and you'll get whatever u need".

    then WHY do I feel let down
    by the ones I really trust
    and WHY do I feel as though they'll just stab my back
    and WHY do I feel
    that the night ain`t no more blue
    and WHY do I feel its just full of black

    If life is a roller-coaster ride then WHY am I going down
    If life is a mixed bag then WHY do i feel its just a frown
    if life is bliss then WHY do i feel its just a bane
    If life is a kiss then WHY do i feel all the pain...


    If u like the stuph, then hear it out as well on my page:

    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=565809
     
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  2. SG1

    SG1 "Brown Jesus"

    Your Guitaring Skils are nice .. Country Side stuff is alwayz good to hear .. overall good song duder Reps on your way
     
  3. jozko

    jozko Banned

    Nice one again! Liked it especially the start. Ur user id makes more sense to me now :D
    reps follows

    edit: again that damn spread issue. 2 reps pending
    edit2: very much liked wordings. :beer:
     
  4. geniusoid

    geniusoid Acoustic Alchemist

    Hey thanks guys....sadly i dont sound even half as good now...those adoloscent days... :p

    @SG1 - Country? I for some reason thought this was more pop/soft rockish (ok dont hit me for stretchin it - if Adams qualifies as rock, so does this!)

    @ Jozko & SG1 : Thanks for the reps guys! (pending as in case of Jozko! :p )


    Therez this other song called Time Machine, which I never finished singing..has more meaning in it - shall post soon! :D
     
  5. jozko

    jozko Banned

    geniusoid don't you really find time to work on these songs anymore. It started so beautifully to me. nice lyrics. Heard thrice thought you could make it much more beautiful. you have excellent guitaring skills too. you don't want to try? You always talking of college days :))

    Any optimistic poems here by youngsters one on bright tomorrows? I have read deaths, SGs wars, and ur whys

    I donno how reps thing works. I had given u a rep earlier i am not allowed to give you anymore. Perhaps it might be enabled if u rep me, well for worst spamming i mean :D
     
  6. geniusoid

    geniusoid Acoustic Alchemist

    Haha thts ok - i have no clue on the reps part either! Too lazy to read the rules too... reppin u - yeah i`ll try tht :p
    Well yeah I really dont have time after comin home frm work - but have been givin comparitively more time to just layman strummin if nothin else.... u gotta be clear of priorities and 6 strings cant pay me as much as my MBA does! :))
     
  7. jozko

    jozko Banned

    ^ no no, quit job u teach here, there are over 32000 members here. u can charge 5Rs from each a month , ;D
    keep rockin. will go through soundclick one by one after days spam.
     
  8. Morbid_Angel

    Morbid_Angel Sid the sloth

    jozko after repping a guy.
    Rep 3 other ppl and rep the guy again.
     
  9. jozko

    jozko Banned

    thx aj, can't find 3 ppl deserving rep here. i gave one to genius, one to SG. gotto spread 2 more. ok will try. 2 reps pending to geniusoid.
    oh i forgot to rep bjr :( will do
    thx AJ
     
  10. geniusoid

    geniusoid Acoustic Alchemist

    Hehe! if it werent for the kerala heat, i might have just taken ur offer....but job security mann!!! I want tht :(
     
  11. jozko

    jozko Banned

    ^ i c u r in two minds:p u can do it from there not Kerala. I assure you that your job here is secured. Nobody teaching here is fired. :p btw Kerala is not a hot place at all, only movies are
     
  12. Morbid_Angel

    Morbid_Angel Sid the sloth

    @jozko
    Where are my reps?

    Edit : You can always give negative reps too ^^
     
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  13. jozko

    jozko Banned

    Sorry AG, u deserve a lot for all the help. reps coming

    I never give. I learned in school that two negatives make positive
     
  14. Morbid_Angel

    Morbid_Angel Sid the sloth

    AG? I hate AGs Dude.

    And Just give 3 negatives and It will all be fine.
     
  15. jozko

    jozko Banned

    been listening to genuisoids fusion so the confusion.
    Dude said I use speech to text s/w. blame it on that. AG AG AG AJ ah works now :)
    three negatives makes a positive and a negative, then they cancel each other. What a waste of time. Nah
     
  16. Morbid_Angel

    Morbid_Angel Sid the sloth

    ^
    Which speech to text s/w you use? I want it too.
     
  17. jozko

    jozko Banned

  18. geniusoid

    geniusoid Acoustic Alchemist

    *tries to save the post before it gets moved to comp section* ;)
     
  19. g0g0l

    g0g0l ! SpAm

    Good performence and poem :beer:
     
  20. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Nice wordings though cudnt hear the song but by looking at the response it seems to b perfect....:beer:

    Reps for ya....
     

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