Where i died... ( strictly not an erotica )

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by vishwa_81us, Jan 2, 2006.

  1. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

    Dear All,

    this a incident that happened with Mr Ant during his journey... Try to read this with nice intentions..

    i woke up in morning and decided to walk..
    long was the distance but believed in my luck..
    slowly i started climbing the big bed..
    soon i was up on the bedsheet that was red..

    with the blurred vision I saw some big thing moving near me..
    when i came close i found wat human call hair..
    it was a pleasure to be there...
    i stepped in and reached a smooth surface..
    i doubt human call it face..

    my destiny took me to that red skin..
    it was wet and sticky i guess human call them lips..
    i was tired and decided to rest there..
    soon my legs slipped and i was over a big mountain...
    i found another such hill near that one..
    they were moving slowly but i decided to go on..

    i cud find my legs digging inside in that soft sand..
    slowly i reached the peak and hold it with my hand..
    i wanted to stay there for the rest of my life...
    but suddenly an earthquake threw me away..
    i was again on a plain surface..
    i doubt that was sumthing else other than face..

    slowly slowly i was walking down..
    and suddenly i fell in a well..
    i doubt human call it navel..
    with all courage i came out of that..
    first time i realised i have grown fat...

    i kept walking till i reached a dark jungle..
    i don't know where the hell i was..
    it was dark all arround me and my glass.. ( ant was spexy )
    i moved the trees and herbs with my hand..
    finally reached a place that was not of sand..
    I doubt wat humans call that piece of land...

    with all my efforts and courage i tried..
    but that was my destiny where i died...
    where i died....
    where i died...

    Forgive me god and give that ants soul peace.. amen :eek::

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  2. knight_guitar

    knight_guitar Lead Guitarist

    Y can't i never read ur poem with nice intentions vishwa.. but.. anyways it's good and i'm giving you reps.. dude.. nice.. work.. !!!
  3. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!


    i couldn't even laugh at this 1... it's horrible
  4. knight_guitar

    knight_guitar Lead Guitarist

    Give him some credit.. atleast he can think something else.. beside erotic stuffs !!
  5. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    well.. except his lame attempts at erotic poetry, he has come up with different stuff before..... i even helped out in extending 1 of his earlier poems which was actually funny (i mean what he wrote was funny).

    this is bad.
  6. knight_guitar

    knight_guitar Lead Guitarist

    unfortunately i never saw his not too erotic stuffs.. !! ..
  7. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    hmm average... cant say its bad...n cant say that its good either.. :)
  8. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    well actually, it did make me laugh when i first thought vishwa said

    "this a incident that happened with my aunt"

  9. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

  10. .:SpY_GaMe:.

    .:SpY_GaMe:. New Member


    vishwaa sorry but ur poetry smacks of "not so nice intentions"


    n some geographical details on which part of the human anatomy was the ant at diff parts of ur poem plzzzzzz.....
  11. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    vishwa.. stop being a perverted prick.

    i'm editing ur post not just coz it was abt me but coz it was disgusting.
  12. shsnawada

    shsnawada Cyborgs &amp; Pasta

    Well, i really dont need to write anything here. Cryptic and me have the same opinion for 99% of the time :grin:
  13. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

    ya i understand.. this poem too is not clean.. but believe me from now onwards u ppl are going to get some really clean and good stuff... thanks Trish for liking my other works.. and i m sorry for that post.. it was not in an intention to hurt u..

    my this act is really apologised..

    So now onwards my new year resolution will be:---

    Lets make IGT clean and green....
  14. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    ^^^it's OK... and if u ever wanna post 'erotic' poems or smthng... remember, it can be done in a 'clean' way as well.
  15. sanju_strings

    sanju_strings 50 Pai$e &lt;3V/S&lt;3 50 CeNt$

    erotic stuffs in clean wah is tht suppose 2b cryptic angel :p
  16. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    THIS POEM WAS GREAT TERRIFIC ........ bahut acche
  17. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    THIS POEM WAS GREAT TERRIFIC ........ bahut acche
    totally original
    good imagination
    but question still remains where is the ant ??
    ya its the graveyard-of-rebirth
  18. tumhare_divya

    tumhare_divya luvs 2 luv...lives 2 luv

    i really love yur evry poem hunny!...sumhow i find them all so funny!...

    wut a cute poem...typical vishwa style...you said strictly not erotic na...but sumhow i find sum erotica in all yu write....(maybe i am (in crypti's words)...a " perverted prick" too...)lol...
  19. akkyy21

    akkyy21 #%@!$&

    ^^ thts really not funny man :annoyed:

    Some strict moderation required on this forum. It aint ****oholic fest or sumthin, is it?
  20. guitarangela

    guitarangela gran'ma

    well, the poem was funny to me.....and u said, to have good intentions..........but after reading it, i don't think i had good intentions about the poem or u :p: .........well, keep trying.....practice makes perfect :dance:

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