[[..Where Death Dwells..]]

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by vini, Jun 9, 2006.

  1. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    Where Death Dwells

    Something tells me that today would be a different day for me as i make way to a building dewlling amongst darkness and stormy clouds

    Living Cadavers mocking past me and i feel as if they stare at me asking why
    Every minute a bin full of cotton wads dripping blood catch my eye

    People buying tickets to Heaven to get rid of their living hell
    And for some the time has already arrived to depart as tolls a bell

    I still am walking through those dirty corridors trying not to feel numb
    but the noise of neverending screams sends me to a state of delirium

    Finally i get out of this place and sigh a breath of relief and all i got infected with are few sleepless nights contracted from those living cadavers i met

    For the rest of my life. i'll wish that none of my near one gets to go there
    Because its a place where spring of blood flows and death dances bare

    ps- If u havent got the "place" in question..then let me tell u, u can take that as a Hospital..precisely speaking i went to a Cancer Hospital!..and it was such a trauma to be there, so have tried to put my ordeal down to words!..
  2. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    One of your best if not the best didi. Moving imagery and just really really good. Kudos and for the first time reps :beer:
  3. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    thot i made it a lil dumb by intensive rhyming at so many places....but then..im letting it be, coz if i change a couple o words..then it would kill my poem

    thanx for reading chotu... :grin:
    Devilshly_Pur$ and Garima like this.
  4. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    ^Meh, mere technicalities, the overall product you should be proud of.
  5. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    really well written!!
  6. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Dark & impressive….
    The last two lines shows the basic mentality of every human being….that no matter what they go through but they always wish that their near ones are far far away from those painful thoughts….
    Reps reps reps ……..:grin:
  7. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$

    Excellent ... so nicely written , I can actually visualize everything ..

    reps ...
  8. i never thought that u could write such a nice and deep poem vini :shock: ....good one ..reps ...
  9. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    thanx everyone!
  10. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    very well expressed ...
  11. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    bahut acche yaar !!!!!!
  12. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    vah vah vah...
  13. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    ok...thanx for reading!
  14. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Good one girl
    write and post more often:)
  15. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    ummm.. "more often"?? :think: ...i cant help yaar..i write..when im bitten by poetry kida :Tongue2:
    rather..when im going thru such times when it becomes a necessity for me to put my thots down to words...anyways thanx4 reading sweety!!

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