When I Was Fourteen

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by folkpoet80, Apr 20, 2006.

  1. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    I wrote this last summer during my trip to India. Compliments/bricks/comments are appreciated.


    Many years ago when I was fourteen
    I fell in love with a sweet seventeen
    And yes, I knew she'd be the one
    The light of my life that I'd never seen

    The way our love was, seems just like a tale
    Where the waves, they soar, while lovers sail
    On the ship of dreams when the night is young
    Where the night bird sings while the moon is pale

    Then I went away and we drifted apart
    Guess I knew it all right from the start
    Still I love her oh yes, I do
    Lord, she'll always stay in my heart

    This is her song; it's all I can give
    Until the very day this heart will live

    Back in the days oh I didn’t know
    These songs I write, they won’t ever show
    How she controlled every beat of my heart
    Now that she's gone, guess I’ll never know

    Here I sit alone when she's far away
    She's found a new love, new sun in her day
    But how I long just to see her again
    To say those things that I couldn't say

    So this is her song, it's all I can do
    I hope she remembers I've always been true

    Now it seems like an age when I was fourteen
    When I saw a face like I'd never seen
    The story will live, it won’t ever die
    How I fell in love with a sweet seventeen.

    Gautam Dhar
    30 May 2005
    Rohtak, India
     
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  2. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    good man ......

    Now it seems like an age when I was fourteen
    When I saw a face like I'd never seen
    The story will live, it won’t ever die
    How I fell in love with a sweet seventeen.

    maza aa gaya.........first love they say u can never forget..haha
     
  3. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    This is too good. i jus loved it ... i mean really touching n sweet feeling ... nu he laakhi thi kay ki sach mein pyaar ho gayo tho thaare ko ;) . but repus r for sure.

    jus reminds of ...... when i was sixteen i fallen in love with a gurl as sweetest can be... :) anyways but if u were not a john denevers die hard fan, i wud suggest this for the "i'll be there for u" frm bon jovi.

    :beer:
     
  4. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    abee what a coincidence maine bhi billkull yahi (Bachelor Boy...) hi soocha tha
     
  5. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    Thank you sachoo and madhuresh. Appreciate your comments. I wouldn't like to disclose the reason behind the poem. Let's respect the privacy.
    I'm glad you liked it.
    Gautam
     
  6. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    oh yes yaar.. i do respect ... phir bhi kabhi mood hoga to bata dena ;) .sorry yaar.. jus kidding.

    @madhuresh, bhai hamare khayalaat miltey he hain..aap yun he khafa ho.
     
  7. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    Mujhse mat pooch mere dil ki kahaani hamdam
    Isme kuchh pardaa-nasheeno ke bhi naam aate hain..
     
  8. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    wah guru wah....

    yaar naam to is dil mein he dafan ho gaye hain ... ab yaan toh sirf jee rahe hain yaan pee rahe hain ..
     
  9. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Mr Dhar....r u from Kashmir?

    Liked ur poem though.
     
  10. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    I hear you, sachoo! no doubt. But I don't drink. I'm already high on life.
    Walk alone: I am from Kashmir, originally. You're right.
     
  11. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Me too......BHAIYAA!!!!!
     
  12. folkpoet80

    folkpoet80 New Member

    That's neat mate. I've only been to Kashmir couple times though as a kid. Grew up in Haryana.
     
  13. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    Khojne vaale sirf tukde payeenge
    hum jeeboo main kagaj tood ke rahte hain
    chere bhale hi dhek jayeen dil ke aayene main
    baaki naam to invisible mode main rakhte hain
     
  14. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    nice poem..

    from haryaana? i kindaa hate people from there... bad past experience..
     

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